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    dots Submission Name: In my heart.dots
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    Author: lost and alone
    ASL Info:    19/F/Sandiego,CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 159/140/58
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsIn my heart.dots
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    Now that I know,
    whats wrong with me
    I told you,
    that you didn't have to stay
    But you said, that you'd
    stand by my side.
    That we'd do this together.
    But I don't want you,
    to have to be embarresed,
    When people talk about me.
    Because they just can't see,
    the good in me.
    I know in my heart,
    I should lift my hand,
    and wave goodbye to you.
    If it wasn't for the fact that,
    I need you.
    But in my heart I know,
    it just isn't right,
    for me to expect you to stay,
    here with me, because I fear,
    that I can't let go of you.
    And I just don't know,
    what I should do.
    I'm torn between the two.
    My need and my love for you.




    Submitted on 2005-11-10 22:22:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked this poem because it made me think of how selfish we can be at times. a lot of the time we know that somthing is not right it is just intuiton, but we will try to convince ourselves that everything is going to be ok or maybe we are just trippin but we should always go with our intuition because that is what it's there for and our heart is very deceitful and it will full us into thinking that somthing is the real thing when it is not but keep up the good work and congratulations on your new baby
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by always thinking | [ Reply to This ]
      there probably was a hidden meaning in the ploem but i'm not clever enough to figure it. There was breakeage of flow but they were compensated by the meaning of the last line!
    You sure are ALONE!
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]


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