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    dots Submission Name: UNLEASHEDdots
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    Author: Emmalee
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 471/456/138
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 271
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    Description:
       If you've seen Unleashed feat. Jet Li you'l get the jist of this poem.


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    Like a beast on a chain
    going insane
    My bite worse than my bark
    My personality a work of art
    So relentless
    Yet defenseless
    Not a victor, but a victum
    commanded by scum
    Can’t distinguish between the truth and a lie
    still recalling flashbacks from that final night
    Never know what it’s like to feel
    only know one instinct which is to kill
    Just want the pain to cease
    Just want to be unleashed




    Submitted on 2005-11-10 23:10:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this ...Very calm ...considering its content ...My personality a work of art...I do love that line...I really have nothing to comment on ...its all good...I felt that urgency of wanting to be released ...Excellent job
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      You did a very good job. It is reminds me of my Beast Within piece that wrote. I would have to imagaine that if there was an official poem for that movie this would be it. You put it down, that is slang for great job.
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]
      I'd say you related to the film very well, especially the juxtaposion of the character's release to do relentless harm morphing into a desire to be free from harm. The fact that the violent are bound to violence underscores their bondage and frustration, which usually leads to more violent behavior unless they're set free. Nicely done.
    | Posted on 2005-11-10 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      ooo! i like this. it's short and i very much like how you rhymed it. i haven't seen unleashed but your poem is good even without me watching the movie. i feel that it's very powerful. the choice of words, the way you wrote it.

    suzi
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by sushi wok | [ Reply to This ]



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