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    dots Submission Name: Think About Yourselfdots
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    Author: Suicidalchild51
    ASL Info:    15/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 402/332/83
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 221
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 632



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       This was just somthing that came out of my head. i dont like the ending. i think i could have worked on that a little.


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    dotsThink About Yourselfdots
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    Teens getting pregnant, act a fool,
    You all think its cool,
    To drop out of school.

    Not getting your full education,
    Theres so many, your like a nation,
    Just think about the next generation.

    Everywhere you go, its gonna be hood,
    Everyones living like they never should,
    You not even save, in your own neighborhood.

    Dead bodies is piling up,
    Your sisters gonna be a dirty slut,
    People sneaking pills into your cup.

    Lets try to be smart,
    Think of your loves hearts,
    Pull together and do your part.




    Submitted on 2005-11-10 23:25:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wtf? this doesnt seem like something u usually write...but thats ok...its alright try and fix it up... it did make a lil sense but i dunoo
    <3 kelly
    | Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by bleedinbabygrl8 | [ Reply to This ]
      it did sound like u were rapping a lil bit. it's ailright to be honest but i like the message u were trying to send. it was optimistic and u were trying to tell people to accept right over wrong. good job
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I didn't understand it 100% but it was alright... its been a while since I've talked to you... hope you ain't gonna quit the site
    | Posted on 2005-11-13 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
      yo that sounded like poetry with a hiphop vibe to it. I loved it. I like the ending and it made me want to...show this to other people. You know wake them up a little bit. I like how you worded it and how you stated some issues dealing with our generation and how we need to grow up. Keep writing.

    ~~Danni~~
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      yes we should all do ur part...

    i reallly liked this it has a nice upbeat when i read it made me feel like changing and doing good
    instead of moping around and being sad

    Darkness of the Grim Draco
    | Posted on 2005-11-10 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]



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