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    Author: weepingprophet
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 26/44/31
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       ~The depth of an eating disorder is of an individual's own decision. Personally, there are never ending battles in preventing the distortion of what were once clear perspectives.~weepingprophet


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    and i told you once
    that you were everything
    that i'd die for you
    i lied

    i told you formality
    you took it as sincerity
    i said i couldn't live without you
    but i'm still breathing
    this heart is still beating
    so i am the liar

    you chose her
    or did she choose you
    i'll blame you both
    but everyday
    i'll pry my eyes open
    and that same reflection
    will stare right back
    i'll stick my finger down my throat
    i'll refuse the spoon and fork
    and one day
    i'll wake up from half a night's sleep
    that's all i get these days
    if any
    and i'll look at that reflection
    the girl you left
    and i'll be different
    smaller

    and i'll say
    no, you were the liar
    i am just a dead girl
    in the wake of a nightmare
    and you are just an illusion
    a promise of my imagination
    i am this frail figure
    pathetic enough
    to stare until the sun goes down
    and we are both liars
    unaware
    of what a promise is




    Submitted on 2005-11-11 02:03:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the honest emotion your poem displays. It isn't the most complex, structure-wise and there are some errors in word choice. For instance "I took you formality" is awkward, but I like the simple theme of having a serious problem and finding that you can't really rely on others to help you fix it
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by nolram | [ Reply to This ]


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