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    Author: JTrickly
    ASL Info:    23/female/
    Elite Ratio:    1.69 - 10/4/13
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Society
    Total Views: 670
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1194



    Description:
       Just somthing to think about before you get dressed in the morning... with our designer shoes and high priced shirtsAre you really being you or being some else? Originaity. I wrote tis with those questions for myself as well as others. to give people something to think about.


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    Orignality
    Please don't freakin smile at me
    It makes you look like everyone else
    smiling instead of frowning
    Taking the upper instead of dealing with the downers in your life
    Trying your best to hold on tight to the blek and somewhat mystque reality
    That 's all just fake!
    the question really is what's really real and what's reallly fake?
    What's been done before and what ain't?
    But hey that's today's version of originality
    Do all that you can to be something that your really not
    Pretend that your hot
    And that your heart is ice cold
    That the world around you is just so old
    And that your fresh and your tight
    ...and maybe if you believe it long enough you really will become all of those things that you pretend to feel...
    But originally
    Truthfully speaking
    It's all been done before
    From the temperature of how the world may treat you
    To how nice, soft and warm your heart feels when another soul reaches out to greet you
    So what really is so original about originality?






    Submitted on 2005-11-11 02:05:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that was cool it gave me something to think about. nice.


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    | Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      Yea its confusing. just like mine lol. i wrote a description for mine if you want to take a minute to read it just go back to my site. its not the best but it makes you think. thinking and reading strengthens your brain that is partially why i write poetry, so people could get better idea's of what they might want to write about. You give great ideas, keep writing because soon youll knock good sence into people and become loved for the work you have achieved, every one has an imagination and some just keep it inside because think its childish, but i say use your imagination to fullest extent because that will bring your writing to life. I use my imagination and it has brought me to outstanding wrting, that i have written outside of this site that i have yet again failed to post them.
    <3
    | Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by Lelian Marie | [ Reply to This ]
      wow thats confizzling..but i got it. its good and its true. wow is it true. everyone now is all trying to be "emo" and "goth" and "dark" its so annoying. i dont believe in labling so thats y i put the qotation bunnie's. lol. well i like it. its grrreat!
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by crazygothchika | [ Reply to This ]
      your poem is pretty good, but it felt more like a first draft. Maybe you should tighten it up a bit more? It's your poem, i guess you know what you want it to be. Oh, and you mispelled a couple of words.
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by punkgrunger27 | [ Reply to This ]


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