Description: Information for the poets that do not know, this form or style is called Tetracyts. It is a syllable poem with at least five lines. Count is 1,2,3,4,10.
A double Tetracyt, syllable count the same (20 syllables within one verse, count goes like this,
1,2,3,4,10,10,4,3,2,1, and so forth. You can make as many verses as you choose, following the one syllables and ten syllables back to back as shown within the double Tetracyt.
Now as for how I wish for you to review, I would like your honest opinion as being earnest with my poetry I definitely appreciate. If this should be your poem, would you like to see it published? If it was published, and you ran across it while reading, would you want to stop and read or glance and turn page?
This was derived from the poem, "The Many Faces of Man", thank you Daniel Barlow for your suggestion to lay down "The Many Faces of Man" because of this suggestion, I was able to pen the poem "Mardi gras Mask."
Thank you for reading, and any words found that you would consider a different word, of course staying within the correct syllable count, will be greatly appreciated.
To be honest, I don't like this poem either. I like most of the content and the inventive way you chose to show it. The problem as I see it is that you've gone from the confines of one form to the confines of another. Forms are great but it takes time to master them and I'm not seeing mastery here. I'd prefer this as freeverse or rhyme and meter but with more space...say 4 line stanzas with only the 2nd & fourth lines rhymed. I've written a lot of poems in that style in the past and I think it's a great form. Just one guy's opinion...and this effort is an improvement. You've got the same message across with fewer words and a great concept.
This is very interesting. I like the form and thank you for the description. I am unfamiliar with tetracyts so your description allowed me to appreciate the form here. You did a nice job with keeping the form as it should be with appropriate amount of syllables and also, your message is a good one. Such a complex subject when you think of all the many masks people wear everyday. It is sad that people cannot just be who they are and be real. The mask always comes off anyway, just a matter of how long it will take. Thanks for sharing this. Nicely done. Take care.