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    dots Submission Name: Eternal paindots
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    Author: ladydeathstrike
    ASL Info:    27/F/Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 259/284/94
    Words: 264
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
    Total Views: 599
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Johnny Cash's video hurt really spoke to me
    its like he's describing how i feel.


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    dotsEternal paindots
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    his words are true,
    his tears bring relief to my soul.

    he has taken my feelings and turned them into something true
    i sit in front of the broken mirror and ask myself why im left all alone

    i cannot stand the pain
    the realness of this place

    the dissapointment
    the hurt
    the love

    the end...

    everyday is a lifetime
    everyday i die

    nobody undestands
    i wonder why?

    my only friend
    the pain

    my enslavement
    my soul

    I sit buried in tears
    wondering why i cannot feel
    hoping for a new day

    wishing for a differenet heart
    waiting for an escape

    the broken pieces
    i cannot tape them back again
    and i sit and cry
    for my failures
    for my lost love
    for everything that i want to be
    but cant...
    for all the hope and for all the pain

    i cry for humanity
    and i cry for myself
    i cry because there is no end

    the wounds i carry with me
    are just memories carved deep

    i dont think of god
    of salvation
    and eternal life

    all i want is to live just once
    but i always end up all alone

    in a dark room
    where no one can see me

    in a dark room
    where i can truly face the pain
    without looking at myself


    fleeting time robs me of life
    and my image shatters everyday.







    Submitted on 2005-11-11 07:12:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love the meaning of the poem but I have to say that this is the first time that your poem has left me confused. I understand what it is that you are trying to say, I feel it myself everytime I hear his song, but it isn't clear to me. I understand that in a poem sometimes the meaning will be hidden and that you must seek it so I will continue seeking for the meaning of your poem.

    "all i want is to live just once"
    I loved that quote and can totally relate to it. I reread your poem again and I think I understood it now. I can relate to this poem and love how you word it. I do have to admit though that there are times when you leave me confused or where some of the words don't flow. I don't know why but the first time I focused on that. The second time though I focused on your emotion and though at times you stopped to breathe, I could feel your confusion and your pain. I could feel the longing and the mending. I want to mend the past myself, I try to do it everyday. I am forced to leave the past shattered because I can not go back. I love how you can find inspiration almost everywhere. I wish I could be the same. Do not despair the light will shine if not I will bring the flashlight. (sorry trying to make a joke). Seriously, though the cave that you live in will one day disappear and the sun shall shine. There will be no more rain. No more tears shall be shed. When that day comes you will not feel alone for you shall have your friends along with you telling you that they will never let it rain on you again.
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by Katrinagolden | [ Reply to This ]
      May I join the club? I am completely lost due to my heart. The mind and heart are completely opposite and to make things worse she does not wish to be with me... for a reason I don't understand. Remember "Love never dies." and "The heart always brakes into four parts.". If life was a game...
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by WriterX | [ Reply to This ]


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