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    dots Submission Name: Migrationdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 509
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Just a quick smoke break poem watching the cloudy day!

    Enjoy the day and weekend!

    Love,Peace,Joy!!! tif


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    dotsMigrationdots
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    The clouds migrate
    across the sky
    A fluffy formation
    floating by


    Birds travelling south
    in a "V"
    Calling "Winter is coming ~
    follow me!"


    The wind is assisting
    bird and cloud
    keep on flying ~
    no stopping allowed!




    Submitted on 2005-11-11 16:56:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a lovely nature poem. How nice to be able to capture these moments in time during your day while having a smoke break. HA! Just sitting there smoking and admiring the view, the sky, the clouds, and the geese flying by. They amaze me how they fly in the formations they do. Instinct in animals is something that has always fascinated me. This is a really nice poem, and the wind is doing her share here too, helping everything along. Lovely. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I think it's great that you can pause throughout your day and see the beauty of it all. This is an uplifting happy nature write.. and I enjoyed it tremendously
    Take care,
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Cute little piece. I like the humorous turn at the end (at least it was to me - like something in a cartoon).

    Peace,

    Joe
    | Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      this was cute :) reminds me of a poem youd see in a childrens educational book. i always love seein birds flying like that, and this is very brief, which works
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by andnow | [ Reply to This ]
      Winter calling - snow is falling
    Migration time is today
    Must make space - within this place
    Cause Santa's on his way.

    I liked your poem.
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      THIS WAS SWEET AND TO THE POINT. I LOVE NATURE POETRY. THEY'RE VERY VISUAL. I ALSO LIKE THE IDEA ABOUT WINTER COMING.
    WONDERFUL POEM!
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
      very sweet and concise. without wasting words or rhythym you manage to very vivdly bring about imagery that definitely fits the poem. very nicely done!
    | Posted on 2005-11-20 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ]


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