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Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 75
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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okay i did spell never like that on purpose. So that's not a typo that was repeated over and over in this poem. I would appreciate comments. Tell me what you really think, don't tell me it's good blah blah blah unless you really think it's good if you think it sucked tell me. I want feedback people something that can help me improve.


Neva nervous
i'll neva let him see my pain
neva let him
see my tears
neva soft
so i'll neva back down
even if i know
i'm gonna get my ass beat
neva punk out
neva forget
were i came from
i'll be rich and famous
but acting ghetto as hell
neva neva neva
will i let a nigga hit me
neva will i fall hard
neva will he turn me out

Submitted on 2005-11-11 23:16:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  neva eva will i let these haters hold me down. this [censored] was so tight. it's like the classic struggle of a strong black woman fighting to show that she will not be pushed around and will take [censored] from no one. them niggas betta knock u out if they hit u, cuz they won't get no second chances
| Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  I like it. I have read better poems from you though. it flowed well, even though sometimes repetition is great, I feel as though u overdid it. What you say in the poem is true though. You should: NEVA let any body do you wrong!
Much love
| Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]
  I like the way you create you own words, just be careful to not overdo it, the flow was nice and almost song like. Also watch out for typos. I mean other than "neva" like "were i come from" rather use "where i come from". Other than that it's greatm maybe you should try not writing in the first person, try it some time.

| Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by Xystus | [ Reply to This ]

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