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Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 188
Class/Type: Lyrics /Love
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okay this is a song i thought up it's not finished. Tell me what you think about it so far.


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verse one
walking around thinkin bout what went wrong
(yeah) every i see you (see you)
the feelings get strong
and i love you baby
never thought we go wrong
we did that's why i'm singing this song

bridge
we use to be so be so cool (cool)
we never once thought to it let go
we use to have an understanding
(what happened to those times)
when we would stay up late (stay up late)
never thinking bout tommorow
now things got serious
where did hell did our love go

chours
haven't made love to you in a while
everyday i feel on love down
what too the times we use to love each other
now everything wrong
never thought i'd be singing this song
but i am ( i am)
i am

verse 2
never thought you'd get cold
never though i would scream
and never thought that we would grow old
and every time i see your face
rember what we had
where did we go wrong (go wrong baby)
where did we go wrong





Submitted on 2005-11-11 23:20:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this one was alright. i think it would be better if i heard it performed. u spelled "remember" wrong in the third to last line. i think the title should be "singing this song"
| Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm not really into reading songs, but i liked this one. It was nice. I can understand what the person is feeling and that's good. Hope to see more of ur writing.
Check out my latest poem and tell me what you think of it.
See ya!
| Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]


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