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    dots Submission Name: Gift Of Goddots
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    Author: Anju
    ASL Info:    25/f/India
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 24/27/15
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       This work of mine is the realisation I had from a lot of my experiences life had given me till now.The poem begins on a happy note and transforms into sadness and then comes hope further ending on a positive note,as it is in the beginning.So kindly read this poem and do tell me if u can relate to it, or whatever may be your opinion.Please feel free to express your thoughts on this poem.
    Anju


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    dotsGift Of Goddots
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    Jubilant people go around
    With the light of joy like a firefly
    And spread them through the ways they trode;
    Life then seems so blissful and light
    With dears 'n' nears just to love;
    Eyes bear tears as such thoughts rush
    And wish myself to be like one.

    The sky so blue, the breeze so calm
    And the waves so mild cause no harm
    To those whose light is a twilight
    In the lives of the ones in dark.
    Neither me nor thou art known
    Of what is kept in you and me
    Which appeals to the passers by.

    Later we realize the depth of Life-
    "The Gift Of God, is our gift of life"-
    So live it on until it ends
    And praise it through until it ends..




    Submitted on 2005-11-12 12:27:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think it should deal more with the feeling of the gift of god the experience of the gift of god you go aroud the burning bush and avoid touching it you can see that it is hot but it is not you should never be afraid of looking god in the eye like most people are after all god is your father and treat him as such he/she has to know that you are alive and not afraid of...
    when god is slow at getting to my prayer list i just remind him of all the people that are on it and tell him to get to work sorry for the ramble
    | Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by papalegba | [ Reply to This ]


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