The Demon Within
|
|
Description:
I, uhh...well, i wrote this in relation to another poem i have written, called The Choice, which i lost in a computer problem, but i found an old copy and i hope to re-write it to its best form. Until then, consider this a less thought-through prelude to The Choice.
The Demon Within
I walk through the valley of the shadow of life, and I fear nothing. Yet this demon within me lashes out, at those that mock me, at those who insult me, at those who mistreat me. Why? Why does the shadow not see my light? I forgive, I am merciful, yet this dark private urge demands justice. It demands BLOOD. How can I resist this? How can I explain my mercy? ...Why resist it? ...Why explain it? Why not just release my hatred and fury upon those who deserve it most, strike them down and end my pain? What do I do, to fight or to join the demon? |
Submitted on 2005-11-12 14:56:19 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post
Comments
| nice writing! well expressed that'll make every reader move in some way... like think....lol well, i guess thats what life's all about to fight the demon within and not to give up into darkness... why??? because theres this happiness thats worth fighting for... cheers! | Posted on 2006-02-12 00:00:00 | by jane_kiedis | [ Reply to This ] | exactly KILL EM ALL why not it sounds like a good idea! i like this one too im outting it on the favs list good work keep this up man good good stuff | | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by Master Bates | [ Reply to This ] | Heh, even being a good person has its penalties. You still see what is wrong with the world, though you my choose to outwardly ignore it, inside it slowly eats at you. | Kind of like when you feel guilty it gnaws, gnaws, and gnaws at you until you get physically sick from it. It's kind of scary how powerful your mind is, if you believe in something so completely, it could happen. I am not talking about fantasticals, I am talking, if you think you are sick long enough, and actually convince yourself this sickness is real, you become sick...scary...Like when you think you are drowning and you panic, you tell yourself that this has to be the way up...but in reality you are only delving farther into the darkness of the water and your mind. I have no idea if any of that made sense...I went off on a tangent, I'm sorry...this seems to be a recurring thing...my tangents that is. Very well written.  Bonnie| Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ] | I am truly sorry that you lost your first works and editing of this wonderful poem. I am sure it still carries and feelings. | I did notice you had a transposition in spelling of the word shadow, fifth line. You might take note that a shadow is constantly aware of the light, it changes because of the changing light, and is non-existant without light. So, it appears to me a shadow is more attentive to light than your poem suggests. Always go to the light, forgive as you wish to be forgiven. We all have sinned in one form or another, at one time or another. As to releasing all your dark feelings upon those you deem to deserve it, remember the golden rule, "do unto others as you will have them do unto you." In order to fight the demons, all you have to do is go to the light. As you are drawn closer and closer to the light; the brighter it becomes. The darkest dark can never overtake the brightest light. To join the demons in the dark, well, that's just giving up on everything. At such a young age, are you really wanting to give up on EVERYTHING? In case you are wondering, the light is faith, love, courage, and happiness. The demons live in the dark, in dark there is no sight of anything;this includes faith, love, courage and happiness. There is just hate, distress and pain to share in the dark. Thank you for sharing this with me, and making me think about how important light is to my life. God bless, Yvonne | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by dycrain | [ Reply to This ] | Fight the demon! I love this poem. For some reason (and it's not that strange) it reminds me of the newest Star Wars movie. I'm sorry, I hope that's not an insult to you, but from me it's a compliment. It showed so much emotion and a struggle that everyone goes through either once in their life, or every single day. Great write, I'm adding this to my favorites. | | Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ] | I do like this, it's very good. It makes me think of a few past and present situations I've had, and been having. I wonder sometimes why I don't repay evil with evil, why I don't do what others do to me. But then I relize it's because then I'd be the scum of the earth, what they are. I'm not sure if that's what you were meaning to say but that's what I got from it. | Great write, keep up the amazing work. -Miss M. | Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by fightingirl19 | [ Reply to This ] | This is really good. I like the flow of it and the detail. It sounds like it comes from the mind of someone who has been in trouble in the past and needs the memories of it to go away. It may not be what you meant it to, but that's how I perceived it. Good job. | [megan] | Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by PolaroidMemory | [ Reply to This ] | |
80763
Edit/Delete posts
Create Writing
Create Journal