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Author:	PolaroidMemory
ASL Info:	18/F/IN
Elite Ratio:	2.93 - 99/93/28
Words:	92

Class/Type:	Poetry/Dark
Total Views:	242
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	586

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I couldn't think of a suitable title for this poem so if you could help me out, that would be great!

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Your days have come to an abrupt end.
The heart will tell of what the mind can mend.
You don't believe in forever.
The mind is dumb, but was once clever.
Time to go, time to leave.
There's nothing left here to believe.
Wonder what's next? Wonder what's ahead?
The answer is in your dreams as you lie in your bed.
You know what they say, tomorrow never comes.
What's real is real and what's done is done.
Time for you to find yourself.
Where are you going? It's hard to tell.

Submitted on 2005-11-12 15:13:57 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was a beautiful poem, so tragic and smooth flowing. I'm adding this poem to my favorite's list. I though that it had its own originality, great job.
| Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a kool poem, but the ending goes away from the rhyming scheme a little. For a title i would suggest something like 'Unknownable Future' or something else about what comes next, this whole poem is about the future. I wouldnt go as direct with the title as fightingirl suggests, be subtle with your title, it represents everything else.

~Kane~
| Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by Kane Martyr | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this, very good. I'm not quite sure what the overall idea of it was, but I can relate some. My favorite part was this:
"There's nothing left here to believe.
Wonder what's next? Wonder what's ahead?
The answer is in your dreams as you lie in your bed"
I think often that the only thing that matters now is my dreams, the world inside my head.

For a title i might suggest maybe Questioning Life?

Like your questioning what is happening in your life, but also questioning life in general. Those are my thoughts, keep up the good work.

-Miss M.
| Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by fightingirl19 | [ Reply to This ]

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