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Poem Number 2


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 254
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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if you read the first one then you get what i'm saying. Anyways this is another short and to the point poem dedicated to the guy i like and i lust for. So tell me what you think


Poem Number 2



Dear J@$$
I want you
I lust for you
lust is a power ful feeling
i want you in me
i want your kisses
i want your smiles
and damnit i want
this wait to be worth while




Submitted on 2005-11-12 17:53:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  did u know that powerful is one word? well it is. anywayz, this was ok, but i really think u could've written more. well at least u get straight to the point. ur a lil forward, but it's good that u speak ur mind. holla
| Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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