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    dots Submission Name: Christmas already?dots
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    Author: Aferisan
    Elite Ratio:    4.75 - 17/25/15
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Story/Longing
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       pie is good for christmas


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    dotsChristmas already?dots
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    The candles, the songs,
    the shopping and wrongs,
    the forgiving the rush,
    the rosy red blush

    Moved back a month.

    Christmas in summer,
    Christmas in fall,
    Christmas before turkey
    Christmas before all

    It'd be better I think
    to keep the month in it's place
    to keep those idiots pink,
    from already taking space,

    with toys
    with banners
    with mistletoe delight

    I hear the music
    I cringe and shout
    perhaps its not christmas
    hopefully its not out

    But sadly I see the commercials for stuff,
    sadly I hear, "Jingle bells" huff,

    And soon it will come
    our snowy holiday,
    but this year to some,
    Early, without our say




    Submitted on 2005-11-12 18:58:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Haha! This is a most amusing poem and very true indeed. I think that by the time christmas actually gets here I am sick of it. haha! I was just saying the other day that all the christmas stuff was out like the day after halloween and the commercials on tv will surely drive me insane by the time it actually gets here. Reading this one put a smile on my face. Thanks and take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-13 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this! I agree that Christmas is coming earlier and earlier every year. It'd be nice to have the Christmas spirit all year long, but it's not even there at Christmas. I think I'll fave this.

    The last line throws off the rhythm, I'd do something about that.
    | Posted on 2005-11-13 00:00:00 | by HaldirLives | [ Reply to This ]
      if your talking about how they start advertising Christmas toys and decorations MONTHS before Christmas comes about, well, I guess I know what your talking about then

    (and yes, pie is good for Christmas)

    I think the only suggestion I can make is maybe change around lines such as this:
    "The candles, the songs,
    the shopping and wrongs,"

    the word 'wrongs' seemed kind of like you just put it there because it rhymed rather than it made sense to be put there.

    otherwise I really liked this piece, it had a cheery tone to it!

    -mystmaker :)
    | Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by MystMaker | [ Reply to This ]



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