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    dots Submission Name: smoke still risesdots
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    Author: snufthepunk28
    ASL Info:    21/f/ak
    Elite Ratio:    4.5 - 244/178/68
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 759
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 583



    Description:
       just expressing random imagery playing within my mind. the first one is better then the last and actully has an end. the second is a sad mans rant, from a storie of long ago.
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    A love that burn deep within.
    Snuff the flame smoke still rises...
    You are my love...
    You are lost.
    The unattainable baring your cross.
    Find your resting ground.
    Lay in peace and arise unto me.

    bleeding eyes, bleeding brow, we thought we all knew how.
    cast a stone.
    judge you we do not.
    condeme yourself...
    condeme yourself...
    selfrightiousness we sought.
    listen to me...
    hear what i say....
    "this man is not the son of god."







    Submitted on 2005-11-12 19:13:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow a semi-religious piece.. Hmm not quite sure how I feel about this It's very random yet I enjoy it quite a bit... I'm not sure exactly what you are talking about but it feels like you lost an important person.. All in all good write Peace Mysterious
    | Posted on 2005-11-13 00:00:00 | by Mysterious Blue | [ Reply to This ]
      It was pretty--it reminded me of the things Kyle (Nammy) writes. He's a morbid freak.

    But this is good!
    I swear...xD

    What? You don't believe me?
    Well when I read it at first it reminded me of a love poem, but it probably isn't, because I read your personal comment upon the piece and have come to realize that you were simply trying to put words to your own imagery.

    Kudos.
    | Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]


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