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    dots Submission Name: "The Champ Is Here"dots
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    Author: PrettyRicki
    ASL Info:    19
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 29/49/11
    Words: 380
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       Its the sequal to "Your Wish Is My Command"...A big twist on things...see if you get it


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    “The Champ Is Here”
    By: Ricki

    Iight, Im here,
    I ain’t go through wit it,
    I dropped the gun,
    Right after the third “click”

    Why should I die,
    For lovin you so much
    Months and years on end,
    Constantly using you as a crutch.

    The potential life to lead
    Is right there, within my reach
    I could fuckin grab it,
    If I weren’t stuck like a leach

    Even though u did it to me
    Its okay cuz Im finally done
    Im sick of fuckin losin,
    Now my battle is won

    Im raisin my arm,
    Cuz the champ is now here
    Ya boi done bounced back,
    “Damn, there goes a tear…”

    Not a tear out of sadness
    Instead, one out of joy
    Cuz Ive finally grown up,
    Im no longer a little boy

    I know I don’t need you,
    Not after the way I was treated
    I came out ontop
    Now your dumbass is defeated

    Look at me now,
    Im better than ever
    Finally got my smile back
    And its gon stay forever

    So no more cryin
    Nah, can’t do that no more
    Im smiling and laughin
    As I walk out your front door

    I do turn around though,
    And blurt out one last thing,
    “Its due time that your ass bow down,
    Cuz now Im the fuckin King”

    That’s right, I said it,
    And damn it felt good…
    That intimidation I had felt,
    Now I no longer would

    “So think about that,
    And lets see how u feel,
    All the so called “I love you’s”
    That you know were never real…

    I can see it in your face
    That for once, it finally stuck
    It was all in words
    And it finally struck.

    To think that I almost did it,
    And pulled the trigger for you,
    Cuz lookin at your face,
    You finally knew…

    I turn around,
    And begin to walk away,
    And for once u didn’t have,
    Not the slightest word to say…

    Step by step,
    I take that walk,
    “For me to say it all,
    And u not to talk”

    The silence behind me,
    Thinking your in “awe” perhaps,
    Then all the sudden…BOOM
    And I hear YOUR body collapse…





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    ||| Comments |||
      hmm well that was a sick twist on this script...didn't see that one coming...

    I really don't have anything to critique here you have an orginal style and i like that so format wise this was good...

    I do think it's odd (and thats not a negitive thing) and refreshing to see a males point of view on a broken heart...I dont think I've ever seen that here...anyhoo keep em coming and I'll keep reading...

    Tina
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      Well...ummm...you are pretty dangerous huh? Can I please have the gun before I get too close? I mean...I'd like to leave the room after this ya know?! LOL

    I am really finding myself to like your way of expression. You write with such heart. Not many have a heart for what they do...I can't say that about you.

    What amazes me the most...how you seem to have this "thug" appearance...yet you can still show your emotion from the inside...you aren't ashamed.

    I commend you on all of this.

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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