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    dots Submission Name: Edendots
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    Author: C. Flava
    ASL Info:    19/M/ILLINOIS
    Elite Ratio:    4.75 - 87/117/28
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       It was Sunday and I decided to write somthing nice


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    dotsEdendots
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    I wish you were apart of me

    you're what completes me,

    like you're my missing rib

    that the lord has taken from me.

    It's like I'm your Adam

    and your like my Eve

    maybe one day soon

    You'll become one with me.




    Submitted on 2005-11-13 19:17:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey honey this is a very nice poem! I missed reading your stuff... What do you mean I'm bogus? I think I figured it out... You read one of my poems huh...?? Some of them were just random thoughts of what if and others were true so I'm not sure exactly what you're mad about...As for the poem this is a good write except for a few grammatical errors but It's nice to read something sweet from you... Love and Peace Mysterious
    | Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by Mysterious Blue | [ Reply to This ]


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