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    dots Submission Name: The Sound of My Voicedots
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    Author: wallya20
    ASL Info:    18/m/Bahamas
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 113/68/26
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 928
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       im hurt but that dont matter especially not to her she just loves the sound of my voice


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    dotsThe Sound of My Voicedots
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    Itís not a secret everyone loves the sound of my voice
    Why? Because I show love wherever I go
    And u love me to
    You feel comforted baby?
    Yeah....I do to lets go n sit lets talk u love the sound of my voice
    Donít you
    Why is it I can speak and u listen but I feel and u donít
    Yeah I'm crying donít u like the sound of my tears
    There speaking Iím not happy no Iím not smiling...
    You canít see that I am can u because your not
    Looking u have to look and observe not just look never mind
    Donít I donít want my life to look like a theatre play
    Full of emotions and love scenes
    But maybe I should
    You love the sound of my voice donít u its still me
    Iím laying in the dark under the world I want to live
    But not in hurt nah but u donít care u jus want to hear my voice
    Promises thatís what Iím seen as
    Am I suppose to hold everything back
    Yeah remember Iím still crying inside
    My feelings are hurt but that donít bother u right
    Iím inferior but you donít mind that right
    I love you now you love the sound of my voice




    Submitted on 2005-11-13 19:46:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This poem is very interesting. You have put a lot of emotions into it. The boy seems tired of this game but he still playing it maybe cuz he fears to lose her. Just a thought do correct me if I am wrong.
    It is a simple piece and very straight, but it is unique.
    I like the way you repeat the same sentence again and again, it underlines your statement.
    The most I like the idea of your poem, I donít know why but the word which say Ąyou love the sound of my voice" just touch my heart.
    Well done.
    I will take this opportunity to thank you for your lovely comments on my poem ĄI ask you". I am glad you like it.
    With love Shabnam
    | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ]
      thank you so much for that amazing comment! it was very sweet of you to say that! lol, you'll be coming backn for more? well, i'll have to make sure that you keep liking what i'm writing! tip, my personal fav poem of mine is "blood stained landscape" if you wanna take a look at that one!

    now, your poem: wow! just totally wow!
    There is so much emotions in here! anger, hurt, confusion, passion, sarcasm, pain and self preservation (just to name a few!!!)

    did this actually happen to you? its so emotional and personal!

    the line "Yeah I'm crying donít u like the sound of my tears"
    you just express and convay so much in that tinny tiny little line, and its so poigniont!

    like you, i will definatly come back to see what else you've written!!

    ~x~
    | Posted on 2006-05-21 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, I'm so impressed, I haven't read anything I liked this much in months....possibly since I joined even. f.uck I'm almost speechless lol, you had so much emotion into this one, so much honesty, wow it's a bit of a long story to why exactly I felt this one so much ummm lemme try to give u some explanation without too many details, my ex bf, Greg, commited suicide about a month ago and he wrote 3 suicide notes, one directly to just me and mentioned something similar, remember the sound of my tears....anyway um you just made me feel this write like it was the night he died again. I'm sorry that was too much detail on my part but you have alot of talent and I will definatly look forward to reading more from you,
    peace,
    ~jess
    | Posted on 2006-05-19 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]


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