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The Sound of My Voice

Author: wallya20
ASL Info:    18/m/Bahamas
Elite Ratio:    8 - 113 /68 /26
Words: 228
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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im hurt but that dont matter especially not to her she just loves the sound of my voice

The Sound of My Voice

It’s not a secret everyone loves the sound of my voice
Why? Because I show love wherever I go
And u love me to
You feel comforted baby?
Yeah....I do to lets go n sit lets talk u love the sound of my voice
Don’t you
Why is it I can speak and u listen but I feel and u don’t
Yeah I'm crying don’t u like the sound of my tears
There speaking I’m not happy no I’m not smiling...
You can’t see that I am can u because your not
Looking u have to look and observe not just look never mind
Don’t I don’t want my life to look like a theatre play
Full of emotions and love scenes
But maybe I should
You love the sound of my voice don’t u its still me
I’m laying in the dark under the world I want to live
But not in hurt nah but u don’t care u jus want to hear my voice
Promises that’s what I’m seen as
Am I suppose to hold everything back
Yeah remember I’m still crying inside
My feelings are hurt but that don’t bother u right
I’m inferior but you don’t mind that right
I love you now you love the sound of my voice

Submitted on 2005-11-13 19:46:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This poem is very interesting. You have put a lot of emotions into it. The boy seems tired of this game but he still playing it maybe cuz he fears to lose her. Just a thought do correct me if I am wrong.
It is a simple piece and very straight, but it is unique.
I like the way you repeat the same sentence again and again, it underlines your statement.
The most I like the idea of your poem, I don’t know why but the word which say „you love the sound of my voice" just touch my heart.
Well done.
I will take this opportunity to thank you for your lovely comments on my poem „I ask you". I am glad you like it.
With love Shabnam
| Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ]
  thank you so much for that amazing comment! it was very sweet of you to say that! lol, you'll be coming backn for more? well, i'll have to make sure that you keep liking what i'm writing! tip, my personal fav poem of mine is "blood stained landscape" if you wanna take a look at that one!

now, your poem: wow! just totally wow!
There is so much emotions in here! anger, hurt, confusion, passion, sarcasm, pain and self preservation (just to name a few!!!)

did this actually happen to you? its so emotional and personal!

the line "Yeah I'm crying don’t u like the sound of my tears"
you just express and convay so much in that tinny tiny little line, and its so poigniont!

like you, i will definatly come back to see what else you've written!!

| Posted on 2006-05-21 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]
  wow, I'm so impressed, I haven't read anything I liked this much in months....possibly since I joined even. f.uck I'm almost speechless lol, you had so much emotion into this one, so much honesty, wow it's a bit of a long story to why exactly I felt this one so much ummm lemme try to give u some explanation without too many details, my ex bf, Greg, commited suicide about a month ago and he wrote 3 suicide notes, one directly to just me and mentioned something similar, remember the sound of my tears....anyway um you just made me feel this write like it was the night he died again. I'm sorry that was too much detail on my part but you have alot of talent and I will definatly look forward to reading more from you,
| Posted on 2006-05-19 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]

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