This was very endearing. I think that maybe if you took a little more time into the piece you could come up with a better creation. I understand where you are coming from. Sometimes writing a simple poem really describes what you feel at the time. Love isn't suppose to be complicated...so why should your expressions.
This was a good write. I am just helping when I say that I think you could have taken it up a notch.
the truth...i don't like it, not at all...it jsut reminds me of some ditsy unpoetic teenage girl in love for the first time and thinks this is the guy she's going to marry...i just don't like it. I mean, i won't lie and say i'm not drawn to darker poems, but i do like some happy and upbeat poems...but i would turn my back on them if they were all like this...it was so..."la-ti-da" there was nothing else there. I think you're a better writer than that.
I really like this and im sure that it expresses how you feel exceptionally well...but can i suggest, without it sounding awful that much of this has been said so many times over ...in other words it is cliché...try to find your own way of expressing the feelings that are obviously there and very strong...i would also suggest that some of the ryhme is forced...but thats not to say i dont think you have done a good job overall...i like it the way it is..i guess im just suggesting to dig deeper...its in there :) ...stormy
This is very sweet. Nice to read your description and realise that you are writing something happy and it is because of this person in your poem. It is amazing how one person can come into your life and make such a difference in your world. Love has wonderful powers and makes all the difference in your outlook on life in general. This poem is very simple and concise, you could have gone more in depth, but what you have here is still very good expression of your feelings. Very good. Take care.