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    dots Submission Name: The Gatheringdots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 685
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       Talking with God yesterday

    Love,Peace,Joy!!! tif

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    dotsThe Gatheringdots

    "IT" was the gathering
    of the berries red
    a feast of color
    on which sparrows fed...

    Off a beaten path
    where only wildlife tread
    One does not seek "IT"
    yet they are led.

    The vine "IT" did speak
    hear what was said,
    "Fruit is the body,
    'I' am the head,
    Drink of the wine
    and eat of my bread;
    Labor is love
    make "IT" your bed;
    Life is a gift of freedom
    not a fate to dread;
    Be an instrument of God
    and you'll never be dead;
    Divine soul and One
    eternally wed."

    Epiphany 2005

    Submitted on 2005-11-14 12:12:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "He" really did speak too you. Divine wisdom. I'm not huge on "Him" per say, but that did make me feel a certain desire to find out if "He" is in me or all 'round.
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, what can I say. Inspirational, Irresistable, Incessant, Incredible, Impressive, Intelectual, Inspiring, Intricate, Immaculate, Intensive, Illuminating and from a pure heart
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      What a lovely and inspiring write Tif,
    A wonderful message and your rhyme scheme fits it perfectly. You can feel love throughout this poem. The realtionship between You and God.. a wonderful thing to have.
    I'll repeat the below comment "good, good writing".

    ~ Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a wonderful poem. So full of inspiration and such a great message here. I like how you speak of the vine with the fruit as the body, and my favorite lines:

    Life is a gift of freedom
    not a fate to dread;

    Such a wonderful couple lines here. A great way of expressing life and how it should be viewed. Life can be so difficult and frustrating, sometimes it is hard to see things this way. But this poem is very inspirational and a delight to read. Thanks for sharing this one, it is wonderful. Take care.

    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      good good writing. i love reading stuff like this. im pressed on how few I's were in there. i liked how the "its" were used. good poem.
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by irish storm | [ Reply to This ]
      'I' am the head,
    Drink of the wine
    and eat of my bread;

    Life is a gift of freedom
    not a fate to dread;
    Be an instrument of God
    and you'll never be dead;
    Divine soul and One
    eternally wed."

    these are my favorite parts. this was cool. it was laid back. it's like all forms of life are pulled to this place to pay homage to the Almighty. it seems like the place they gather at can be the next garden of Eden. great write.
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      It is a beatuiful poem. Yes I hope you write more like this. You are so talented in Gods work and words. This write brings such a peace and my soul so much closer to Gods love.
    Thank you so much for sharing with us. One can see God is working through you. God bless you and keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      hi thanx for the comment on remembrance another great write from you full of pictures that your words portray very nicely done i posted one called untitled today hope you enjoy
    hope all is good
    thanx sandman
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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