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    dots Submission Name: Into Your Beingdots

    Author: Sarah Leger
    ASL Info:    15.f.kissimmee,Fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 436/387/80
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
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       another split personality type of thing


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    dotsInto Your Beingdots

    Run little girlie
    Run and hide
    Under the bed
    In the closet
    Don't let them see
    what it is you hide from me
    I know where you are
    I know how to find you quick
    I'll be by little girlie
    you only have to wait a little bit
    Don't bother to be invisible
    Don't worry about blending in
    I'll see you just the same
    Like Heaven shoved in a little frame
    Bursting forth your light
    Lost and alone
    I'm here to take your pain
    From it I will gain
    Every little ounce
    From it I will force
    My way into you
    To spill my essence in your being
    And never will you forget
    The day I had to force you to see me
    The pride and joy
    You will despise
    The screams that ripped through you
    That night
    Will show through it's eyes
    Will shine in it's smile
    Oh yes, my darling girl
    You will remember
    Just as I will
    And you will finally see me

    Submitted on 2005-11-14 13:31:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmm..sounds familar? I think. lol. Good though. Like woah major good. It um sounded...like umm..yeahh I've got a clue but no one would get it, and it's hard to put it into words. But I'm sure you know what I mean. Saddness? Umm no? Not sure. lol. Amazing write hun.

    And The Torn badger Cries.
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah i feel that ...like Li Li i see that sadness ...but then theres that light ...This is an awesome vent ...She's also right about only having to accept yourself ...as cliché` and shrink like it sounds ...Sometimes when you start getting to know the parts of you that others dont like ...you realise that they are the best parts...and maybe its not you with the problem ...Thats my experience anyway ...Dont be afraid to be different ...The older you get ...the more you'll see....being like them isnt all that great
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      i Agree with LiLi(munchie_1226)

    You should always be happy with yourself
    Life is a battle of Good vs Evil
    The secret to accomplishing a succesful life is grasping the good and not letting the negativity take control
    I can see from your write your struggling with this
    Just remember to every negative there is a positive
    Once you find it it erases the negative
    This is how I live my Life
    Take Care

    Please if you have a chance take a look at some of my poetry and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Such pain here. Get out of the corner girl! I know you get a better view from there...but not much action.

    Such depression going on ...I can hear it. I lived there once...all alone...trapped within myself. Not healthy!

    This was a great vent here. I am sure that if you took the time to really get to know yourself...you wouldn't care what others did or thought. Always be happy with who you are. Always. The only one that needs to give you acceptance...is yourself.

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]

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