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    Author: mon28
    ASL Info:    29 /F /Montana
    Elite Ratio:    6.14 - 176/59/14
    Words: 256
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
    Total Views: 1016
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    Description:
       This is something that I hope to turn into a short story. I started this last night before bed and figured that I would throw it out there for comment. So if you have the time, please let me know what you think so far. Thanks!


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    I have again reached that emotional state. The one where a date or an event triggers my brain to recall everything that lead to its creation and thus branded this specific experience into my memory.
    When a relationship ends with an unburnt bridge, you find yourself tempted to cross every so often. With time the past seems to lose its consistent mediocre aspects. You are left to contend with the extreme highs, or lows, or in some cases both images. These images are the select pictures that flow on that ever rewinding video in your mind. The very ones that tempt you to cross.
    Whether you do or not all depends on if you want a reaction of some sort. I for one keep track of my past, or at the very least, have the knowledge of how to make contact. I need this for me! Saying goodbye forever to someone that lives is just a finality that I neither like nor want to face in my life. A situation may never present itself where I would cross but having the option is a comfort that allows me to move on.
    I found myself at a bridge today. Staring down a long narrow path filled with mixed emotions. My feelings of despair surfaced first. Something that was lost a couple of months ago re inflected me now. ..........




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      When a relationship ends with an unburnt bridge, you find yourself tempted to cross 'it' every so often.

    A situation may never present itself to me where I would consider crossing, but having the option is a comfort that allows me to move on.

    These 2 sections are the only minor changes I would make. As a whole this is a great passage, I suppose it's a feeling or an experience most of us encounter and can relate to at some level, and you've managed to describe it very eloquently.

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    | Posted on 2005-11-20 00:00:00 | by Vastmark | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting. reminds of something i felt and went through. but honestly there are some people you shouldn't sleep with - i learned that the hard way unfortuantely. whatevers. but i remember actually falling and then being wacked in the head and realizing what was going on - but then for some reason i'd running towards the wall again and then wack. yeah - it won't budge the temporary dizziness seemed to take my mind off of the blood that was pouring out of my head. but at least i then i knew that a wall is a pretty hard thing to break through.

    yeah - that's how your little diddy made me feel. good stuff. it was like one of those things, you know?
    | Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      I like reading this- like not just like- like alot like- i get what your saying and wat irish sotrm basically sd it is like ur not willing to say goodbye- wow- like it- love it- awesemo!
    :) Peace out, want to c sum more soon :) Me xx
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by MysterydarkPoet | [ Reply to This ]
      "When a relationship ends with an unburnt bridge, you find yourself tempted to cross every so often."

    very strong. i felt a tingly feeling when i saw this. i like how your not willing to say goodbye. that is strong. and your part on how you found yourself on the bridge once more. that part that i pasted up there, is definatly a Quote. great writing, i dont think you need to expand at all, its good how it is.
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by irish storm | [ Reply to This ]


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