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    dots Submission Name: eyesdots

    Author: papalegba
    ASL Info:    45/male/schenectady ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 52/42/28
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    you look into the eyes
    you see the soul
    sometimes vacant and empty
    you see the lies from past generations
    and the hidden lust
    that you sometimes have to supress
    the old ones would never look into the eyes
    or let someone look into their eyes
    so the secrets would not be known
    so keep a guard
    and your eyes shut

    Submitted on 2005-11-14 15:31:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well I think this is a really good poem. the eyes do tell a story. You can't seem to control what your eyes say to people...so there for you can never hide your feelings unless you shut them forever. Meh well i don't know, i thought it was good check out some of my stuff.
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by cannibal | [ Reply to This ]
      I am sorry to hear that you gave up on the lust in peoples eyes. 45 is not old at all and you are making yourself older by feeling that way.
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by Numb | [ Reply to This ]
      eyes are a window to a persons soul. this was a good write. i liked it. Leave me acomment on one of my posted poems so far. thx.
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by Numb | [ Reply to This ]
      NOOOO I want the lust! LMFAO!

    I get what you are saying through this though. Your eyes can express more then you want known at times. Definitely so!

    People tell me that my eyes can tell a story. I'm sure they could though!

    Great write!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      lmao. well at least you were joking.
    Well i still love this poem and it has been fun talking to you. ttyl. bye
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by Numb | [ Reply to This ]

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