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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsVirgin Paperdots
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    White virgin paper gives itself to me,
    and I taint its purity with my ugly words,
    for like Adam and Eve after the fall,
    it's no longer naked,
    and the possibility of perfection has gone.
    Perhaps if I weren't human,
    I could write something worthy,
    but no matter how great my words,
    my hideous scrawl sullies the page,
    and I realize that all creation destroys something
    if only nothingness.




    Submitted on 2004-04-22 23:05:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "all creation destroys something, even if it is nothingness"

    that is a classic line, aimst....

    you are a wonderful poet and could never spoil a virgin page.

    love this piece.....

    love the allusion to adam and eve and running naked in the garden...then getting the knowledge, biting the apple..and bam..the shame, the covering up...

    maybe we do feel shame somewhat with our words...but is our poetry really an original sin?

    i think not.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-02-18 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      
    Wow, really, really well done. It's suc h great imagery, somehow... I don't know how to expklain it, but i liked it. Very dark. Good job.
    | Posted on 2004-06-02 00:00:00 | by Elegy | [ Reply to This ]
      This stings a bit. I've had writer's block and often had those thoughts like, " what if this is some type of rebellion? What is, in my sleep, the paper whipered something to me to stop up the flow of ideas".. Hmm.
    | Posted on 2004-05-04 00:00:00 | by Casper | [ Reply to This ]
      Nothing raelly to say in way of criticism, its a great piece really drew me in, i had to give it several reads to see everything you had packed into this.

    The only argument i have is more philisophicle, I don't agree that nothingness can be perfection. Secularly, any existance must be better than non-existance. Biblicly if nothingness were perfection God would not have created the universe.

    probably not the imput you were looking for but that is what it brought to mind.
    | Posted on 2004-04-23 00:00:00 | by Snarf | [ Reply to This ]
      this is very cool. i like how you paralleled it to the bible and yeah... either we destroy nothingness or it destroys us... i think thats my personal veiw on life today... great write!
    | Posted on 2004-04-23 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      You know how advertisements are compiled, get the audience's Attention (I loved the title, this alone could draw a crowd) get their Interest (those first lines reeled me in until I was swallowed whole) create a Desire (this spoke so clearly into my life that I wanted to read on and reply, somehow) Get them to take ACTION (well, I added it as a favourite and here's my response. I think it was Picasso who said that every act of creativity is first of all an act of destruction.
    | Posted on 2004-04-23 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece was increible, as your pieces always seem to be, none of the icky spewed out in a minute I'm a genius crap - your work always has been thought out and perfected to a high degree. Liked the reference to Adam and Eve - would not have thought of that. Only thing I have is that I'm fairly sure your it's should be an its. The possessive form doesn't use an apostrophe and the contraction for it is does. :) SUper write, Amy.

    ~ Niphredil
    | Posted on 2004-04-23 00:00:00 | by Niphredil | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't destroy nothingness' perfection cause I don't write on virgin paper - I write on squared paper.
    your title really drew me in and your images are just amazing here. great poem.
    | Posted on 2004-04-23 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      well, i would disagree with you there, dumplin. a lot of your stuff is most definitely worthy. i do get what you're trying to say here, though, and it is an interesting analogy. but does creation always destroy something? and if it is nothingness, what is to destroy? just curious! very interesting write and something to ponder! you got me wondering!
    | Posted on 2004-04-23 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      This is deep, and I am brain dead, so i will say BRAVO, and be done with it before MY words sully THIS page...~Sicobe R. Crow
    | Posted on 2004-04-24 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      You are so modest as to accuse yourself of ruining a blank page! Beautifully conceived and expressed Cuddle
    | Posted on 2004-04-23 00:00:00 | by Lodi | [ Reply to This ]


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