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whisper to my scream


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 129
Class/Type: Poetry /Cutting or Mutilation
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yea i know another one of Danni's poems lol but hey i liked this one alright i think i can work on it more. I want to revise the last stanza diffenitly but anyways tell me what you think of this. I wrote this when i was cutting but like i'm gonna say all the time I"VE STOPPED it's been what three months? yea so i'm getting better.

~~Danni~~


whisper to my scream



i'll scream loud enough
so noone can hear me
act up so much
so no one can fear me

go to my house
just to pick up a knife
blood running down my arms
be introduced to my life

nights filled with tears
shivering in my room
opening up my fears
starting to be gloom

wearing all black
and long sleave shirts
roll up my sleave and get a knife
so i won't hurt

a pain away from pain
tired of playing this little game
so i do the best i can
to wash the blood off in the rain

I really hate to say this
so please don't think i'm mean
..i'm tired of this cutting
give me a whisper to my scream




Submitted on 2005-11-14 17:13:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i dont dig the cutting never ever have but the poem is pretty good. ill scream loud enough so noone can hear me. killer line.
| Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by namesdontmatter | [ Reply to This ]
  this is definitly goin on my faves list its an awesome poemand i think that it expresses alot of emotions that your probably feeling i can honestly say that i know how you feel but i still do cut good that youve stopped and i hope everything turns out ok
take care
izzi x
| Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by fallen_angel384 | [ Reply to This ]
  this is good. but i'ma tell u what i tell other cutters. cutting is lame. very lame. "let me hurt myself cuz i'm so sad" suck that [censored] up. stop being pussies and man the [censored] up!. i'm glad u stopped and i didn't even know black girls cut til i came on this site. i guess i was naive to think that cutting was limited to white chicks. i'm glad u stopped. pain is not the answer when looking for peace
| Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  i can say that i have been there...u did alright overal. good poem my dear! :) i would love it if you would check out my stuff and comment. thx.
xoxo
Reeses
| Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by Numb | [ Reply to This ]
  I cant say i have been there but it shows how much- it makes u feel like u have been in there- in the same position- u brought the nest outa of the message- and awesomly done might i add- (Y)(Y)(Y) Peace out- :) Me xx
| Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by MysterydarkPoet | [ Reply to This ]
  i love your poem, n i guess you could say i feel the same way n that im in the same boat as u i havent cut in a couple of weeks but its the temptation thats killing me. im addin this to my favs good job
| Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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