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    Author: tmullins
    ASL Info:    37/F/Mo
    Elite Ratio:    4.5 - 127/149/41
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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       I just recently started going to church. and these are some of the feelings i had at first. i am so glad that they made me comfortable on the very first visit, too often you feel like they all think they are better than you because you have just started and they have not. now I know differently!


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    I walk through the doors,
    frozen with fear.
    What am I stupid?
    Why am I here?

    A doctor. A lawyer.
    A carpenter too.
    Oh, I don't fit in.
    I feel like a fool!

    They taught me that
    I am no different from them.
    They walk the same roads.
    They sing the same hymns.

    I am lonely no longer,
    when my husband's away.
    My bonds have grown stronger,
    at the church where I pray.

    Come in and you'll see
    God loves us each one.
    Hope can be found
    in the arms of his Son.




    Submitted on 2005-11-14 19:16:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I walk through the doors,
    frozen with fear.
    What am I stupid?
    Why am I here?

    A doctor. A lawyer.
    A carpenter too.
    Oh, I don't fit in.
    I feel like a fool!


    You took the words right out of my mouth, We are searching for a church right now, So many that on that first visit I sit back in despair,frustration, awkward silence. wondering If I'm welcome or "good enough".
    I am glad that you have found your church that welcomes you with open arms. thank you for sharing this wonderful poem..
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by rosered | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem. How nice it is for you to share your experience with us. I am not overly religious, I believe in God but I dont go to church. I am episcopal and went to sunday school and made first communion but after that I decided that God really didnt care where I was when I pray and as long as I have my faith, that is what was important. But I like this poem a lot. It is nice that you have discovered somewhere that makes you feel welcomed and accepted. We all need that feeling in life. I thought this was very well written and expressed. It flowed really well and sends a nice message with your words. Inspirational. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      This a personal write and goes toward your need for companionship as well as fellowship.

    Religous writes are risky and tend to draw at times negative responses. I think that you have pulled this off nicely.
    I will agree with the commentor before me that sometimes people tend to get preachy and turns the reader off.

    it is nice to have a church to turn to for comfort and a sense of belonging. That means that you have found the right church for you.

    I find this write comfortable and honest.

    On another note.

    Stay true to your beliefs.

    Respect and admiration

    Clyde.
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]


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