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    dots Submission Name: Razorblade Kissesdots
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    Author: camoflage
    ASL Info:    16/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 459/295/71
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 1011
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 779



    Description:
       eh...we had a sub today, i dont really think this one was too great, and could use some improvements.


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    dotsRazorblade Kissesdots
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    Raining crimson tears,
    Among those who cannot and do not care
    Zoneing in and out, feeling the pain that will never go away.
    Ongoing agonizing gentle skim
    Remaing for a slight second, the cool touch
    Blame me for the touch, for I blame you
    Leave me to it's gentle caress
    Air so hard to breathe
    Degradation, the scars of its sweet and tender touch cause.
    Exacting revege, the hand slightly pinches.

    Kisses and gentle nudges,
    Impossibly quickly change.
    Seeing the tears it brings to me
    Screaming out as it's gentle touch becomes cold and heartless.
    Expecting the impending sorrow it brings.
    Sigh, slightly as you see the burgundy rivers they create on contact.




    Submitted on 2005-11-14 19:25:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is so... me. Wow. Holy hell... I don't even know what to say. This is going on my fav lists. Please, comment on mine. A writer like you makes a great critic.

    Always,
    Dark Ainjul
    | Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by Ashleigh Mari | [ Reply to This ]
      An excellent write
    You were able to bring us your readers into the reasons you feel the way you do
    Trust me thinking Positive Thoughts
    will help carry you thru lifes turmoil
    It has certainly helped me
    Keep in touch
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Sam its good
    and i know what your saying
    i think i know who you are talking about
    but i don't get this part "Ongoing agonizing gentle skim"

    well yea bye
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by inuyasha_s girl | [ Reply to This ]
      D: This was pretty--
    sad. I guess.
    it is saying to me.
    I'm in so much pain that your love couldn't possibly pull me out, and even the slightest foul movement could result in diasaster.

    Yea.
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. I can relate big time..it was beautiful. i cope the same way and i feel your pain. i love the way you write...fav
    Reeses
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by Numb | [ Reply to This ]


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