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Author: lastdragon
ASL Info:    19/F/MO
Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 38 /43 /13
Words: 98
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Hmmm...this just something I wrote,liked,and posted.


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She sits by her window,
Forever waitting.
Her eyes roam the world,
Forever watching.

Who is she waitting for?
Someone who will never come.
What is she watching for?
Something that will never be.

A path with twists inumerable
A dream with palaces floating
A future with hopes shinning
A golden ring with beauty dazzling

She waits by her window,
Forever sitting.
Her eyes watch the world
Forever roaming




Submitted on 2005-11-15 08:38:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I liked this one the best I think, it didn't feel stretched out and felt very sincere. Also, it was well written, beginning and end and everything, nice, not much to say I guess.
| Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]
  This was pretty good glad to see your writing again and this was a nice place to pick back up. I really enjoyed this one...there's not all that much I can say ATM but it was just about everything you'd want a poem to be in most terms. keep writing.
Peace
| Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
  Waiting is misspelled in first part, but other than that this is really good. Haha, i wonder how many people understood the 'golden ring' reference, marriage im gessing? Keep up the fantastic work jess.

~Kane~
| Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by Kane Martyr | [ Reply to This ]


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