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Family Ties

Author: angelfyre
ASL Info:    17/yes please/here
Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 254 /238 /76
Words: 129
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I don't like the gare...

Family Ties

I lie still in a web on the family tree.
Words float around,
bouncing off me like a trampoline of confusion.
I try to plant their memories in my brain
Failing in the echoing sounds of emptiness
This is what blindness looks like
This is what silence sounds like.
My thoughts corrode in their past.
Sweet hope, turn my mind back to their yester-year.
I don't want to be tomorrow
I don't want to be lost in now.
Beyond repair and tired.
Singing my own corrupted lullabies
Just a doubting student
eager to be proved wrong by the invisible teacher.
My real life thoughts go unnoticed in this animated world.
A candy-coated atmosphere that has made it's mind up about me.
Embarrassed and ashamed I disappear.

Submitted on 2005-11-15 11:20:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was a very good peice, I loved it, I can relate a bit too.
I loved this part:

"Singing my own corrupted lullabies"

Very dark and mysterious, yet sad...I felt it as a cry for help, I don't know if that's how you meant it to be. But I was feelin the emotion in this poem, good job.

-Miss M.
| Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by fightingirl19 | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh yes this is going in the favorites : ) "This is what blindness looks like
This is what silence sounds like" now about your title hmmm let's ponder some more babe... "Invisible" "Unnoticed Beauty" "Lost in Traslation" "Blinded Silence" "Def Darkness" ok i am done. Keep it up love.

XoXOxOxo Tim
| Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by Tim8806 | [ Reply to This ]
  You know...I never woulda read nothin like this if I wasn't signed onto this site. But, it opened my eyes to alot of things. I know the way I feel and bein on here helps me relate to other ppl. I get in my moods and lil down times and I know other ppl do too. You'll be ok...ur hearts in the right place. Keep it up
| Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by PrettyRicki | [ Reply to This ]
  I do agree with Ron, but you are going through your own problems. what is LOVED about this write, is this line:
"This is what blindness looks like
This is what silence sounds like."
that might be in my poems someday, its 2 good lines. i was kind of getting lost in this one for some reason, cant put my finger on it. something tells me "expand?" but i dont know. thanks for posting it though. take care.
| Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by irish storm | [ Reply to This ]
  Dont be afraid to show the world the Love you hold inside
It is just screaming to be let out
Your poem to me says that you are a caring loving soul who just wants to be understood

Stay Positive
Evaporate the negative

Postivity will carry you thru
Take Care
| Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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