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    dots Submission Name: Into The Roledots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 603
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       "I just want to be friends"-quite possibly the most evil and painful six words that I have ever heard spoken to me. And this from the man that claimed he loved me.


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    dotsInto The Roledots
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    I fall back into the role of friend.
    I guess that's what I do best.
    I thought this time would be a little different,
    But it's just like all the rest.

    I fall back into the role of friend.
    I've grown used to being more.
    You've taken everything I had to give.
    I've played your enemy, your lover, your whore.

    I fall back into the role of friend.
    The very word is a vicious taunt.
    You're satisfied when your life is this way.
    What about what I want?

    I fall back into the role of friend.
    It sometimes seems like such a waste,
    To quell that passion that flows between us
    When you come looking for a taste.

    I fall back into the role of friend.
    What a ridiculous lie.
    I won't play your game of charades anymore.
    You can kiss my ass goodbye.




    Submitted on 2005-11-15 11:21:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wonderful!
    I loved the last line...that and 'You've taken everything I had to give.
    I've played your enemy, your lover, your whore.'

    Thi9s was a wonderful poem...
    like I said before...you can do so much better than him...
    Very good job on this one...
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]


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