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    dots Submission Name: Yesterday's Garbagedots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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       I am tossed aside again. It's a vicious cycle.

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    dotsYesterday's Garbagedots

    Just toss me out with yesterday's garbage,
    Leave me sitting on the side of the road
    With all those other things you have no use for.
    We make quite a hefty load.

    I was once a cherished possesion,
    An heirloom that was built to last.
    Now I'm dirty and broken,
    Just another reminder of the past.

    I was once your favorite plaything.
    Then you found another toy.
    I became a mild curiousity.
    Seems I was made for you to destroy.

    Occassionally, you still play with me.
    But I think it's more like abuse.
    Now you tire of me again.
    Once more, I have no use.

    Just toss me out with yesterday's garbage.
    What are you holding on for?
    You promised that you would love me forever,
    But now you don't want me anymore.

    Submitted on 2005-11-15 11:27:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow...I liked this a lot...I couldn't pick out my favorite line...I really liked this poem overall...
    The last line was abrupt and I liked that...
    sort of like how the relationship ended sort of abruptly...but not I suppose...
    Personally i think that Tony is a dumbass and that you deserve (and can do) so much better than him.
    very very good job on this poem.
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this poem bc i am currently in a relationhip that this poem displays exactly. broken promises and merely lust is confused for love at times, particularly in my instance, and this was a perfect illustration. thanks.

    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by blndeliz | [ Reply to This ]
      hey there...is this poem about a break up? if it is...i totally understand...i had a terrible one too...u cud read unchanged with time by me...
    anyway...about ur poem...the clear message is that...you were once like the most prized possession for ur partner, and now suddenly u feel as if you're nothing at all for that person...atleast thats what comes across to me...hope u get over it all really quick...maybe that person was never meant to be for you...
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by mihir | [ Reply to This ]
      Good write
    Iknow it helped you release a lot of the tension you held inside writing it

    The only advice I will give is move on and learn from the situation
    Know this
    It will be much harder for someone to hurt you in the future because you will be prepared

    Take Care
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, great write about the pain of loss. it seems to have a weird mental connection because as a kid, everybody had an old toy that they just loved, but it got thrown away because it was so broken or dirty. great connection.

    "I was once your favorite plaything.
    Then you found another toy.
    I became a mild curiousity.
    Seems I was made for you to destroy."

    That is my favorite stanza. it just kind of hammers home in my mind. easy connection. good write. thanks.
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by brokenroses | [ Reply to This ]

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