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Always Thinking Too Much

Author: Munchie_1226
ASL Info:    25/F/E.STL
Elite Ratio:    4.49 - 1831 /1834 /185
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Class/Type: Lyrics /Venting
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Someone read one of my previous posts "Words Of A Pimp" and said that I needed my butt kicked.

Now...I thought that this site was for poetry...shouldn't poetry reflect whatever the writer wants it to? I mean...isn't that the real definition of poetry. To take a subject that others won't come near...and make it into art?

Whatever.......I'm Always Thinking too.....

Sorry to let this side come out of a girl again. Yet...if you know know my temper.

Much love to the rest of you as you watch me act a fool.


Always Thinking Too Much

Testing…testing…testing my nerves.
Displaying a mouthful of critical words.
In all actuality you’re scared of my verbs.
Because I display poetically what most don’t want heard.

Pimps, whores, money, drugs…
The life of a hustler, the life of a thug.
Having no idea the hole that you’ve dug.
After I put you on life support, I’ll then pull the plug.

See..this is a route I tried to once leave behind.
Tried to put all animosity out of my mind.
I guess it’s too hard for me to stay confined.
You’ve given me full opportunity to act a fool and unwind.

So…here I am once again.
Exposing my temper through the ink of a pen.
My art is something I will fully defend.
Because it’s different then yours you chose to offend.

Then when I ask you “what is the deal?”.
You couldn’t back up the expressions you feel.
It’s people like you I turn into a meal.
I’m not trying to cause a fight, just trying to be real.

So let me put this, into full effect.
You put yourself into debt, now it’s time to collect.
I’m not asking for an apology, just for respect.
I’ll say this once, and I’ll say it direct.

If you don’t like my words, or what I express.
Don’t say I need my butt kicked, and then choose to regress.
This isn’t a threat…this isn’t a test…
Yet, I’ll still bury you with the haters that I previously put to rest.

Submitted on 2005-11-15 12:46:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hey LiLi,
My friend! Remind me to never tell you that you need your butt kicked my deaar... you told 'em ...gotta hand it to ya , whoever this was, you flat out told 'em. And I loved the way you did it too. I love to see a person stand up for themselves and I like the way you worded this so much it is going straight on my favorites list! I tip my glas to you LiLi because you were writing here, I mean writing exactly what you feel and that is great!
Amazing what one can do when they are about to get their butt kich hu?HaHa!LMAO!
Seriously I liked this one a lot, it is a fav,
| Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem kicks ass. Totalyl rocks my socks. It almost sounds like a rap song to me. You need no kicking of the butt. Whoever made that comment is probably some lamer that doesn't know what poetry is all about. This is exactly the type of stuff I like to read. No BS just straight forward blunt and to the point in your face poetry. I write rap songs and damn this is pretty sweet. peace.
| Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by musclebound350 | [ Reply to This ]
  Ive had a look thorugh some of your poems and for some reason I ended up repsonding to this one first. I just found the energy and rawness of your voice here thrilling. . .and amsuing to see boys and little men get all worried and confused at such words from a lady.

From reading some of your other poems, there is no doubt that you are a lady, and its nice to see that you are able to express a diversity that makes you more than a girl ..if you get what I mean .. I had a look at the pimp poem and I thought it was nifty .. made me laugh .. at the same time it represents something .. like you mentioned .. that many so called poets dont want to touch on because they have some sort of notion that poetry has to be rosy, romantic and uber sophisticated .. well [censored] em .. sorry .. but it does annoy me when peoples inhibitions try to choke other peoples creativity and their muse .. its good to see that you roar out against them .. and use their crap to write ..

your writing is quite different from mine .. a more literal and direct voice than mine .. which is something that to me is refreshing when it is done well .. with a natural and raw flow like most of your writing seems to be, and this poem definately is .. I just can't write like this it always impresses me whern people can sound poetic in such a direct manner .. I guess I mean .. the words seem very close and connected to the voice ..which is what I like about this poem and it's a good shout back at those regressive try hard poets who tries to stuff the ever expansive and expressive dance of words into some dank little box ..

| Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by x-ianhoyskolt | [ Reply to This ]
  where do you keep your balls? in a jar next your bed? li, there was so much ballsy verbiage here that i confused it for a lockerroom shower at an all-boys school. you don;'t take [censored], and i'm loving it. put it to these mouthy lil [censored]es proper. u a emcee n u know it. stop fronting lik ur skills cut off at poet. u a trip!~P
| Posted on 2005-11-24 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Man, awesome rhythm, awesome everything? lol I loved this. Fantastic work, once again. I loves this part:
"It’s people like you I turn into a meal."
Usually I might think that was stupid, but I get it...and I love it...

Keep up the great writes :)

-Miss M.
| Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by fightingirl19 | [ Reply to This ]
  HOLD UP...Chic...this [censored] is more than nice...more than good...more than average...this is off the muh[censored]in meat rack lol. I loved this. Im dead up as I tell you this. Yours is a shortened up version of what I just wrote. Ain't got it posted yet but its comin. Every word had me stuck. I dont know what to say. I loved every bit of it. The way you expressed yourself is out of this world. Your the first one to be added to my favorites...Id be dumb not to.
| Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by PrettyRicki | [ Reply to This ]
  "I’m not asking for an apology, just for respect"
"Yet, I’ll still bury you with the haters that I previously put to rest."


very good, very good. i loved those. i completly agree what your trying to get across in this piece. i heard about a english teacher that used to Fail people for their poetry. But how can you Fail people for self expression? just like what you said. "shouldn't poetry reflect whatever the writer wants it to?"
very true. thank you for this rhyme. i enjoyed reading it. keep it up. Respect.
| Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by irish storm | [ Reply to This ]

*steps into ring with a large ROUND ONE sign*

another awesome write...we just like to see you with yo feathers ruffled cuz that's when the real li li stands witted yet still smooth...and umm snoop lyrics? *snickers* let's aim higher...dare I say 50???
| Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  HA HA!

Li Li said knock you out...I'm gonna knock you out!


i LOVE it Li, and YES I AM an instigator! partly because you flow like a madwoman who deserves much props, and partly because i am always in awe of your ability to stand up and say...dont push me, cause i WILL push back!

you are on fire with this one! i felt this punch!

*standing Ovation*

-nikki ;P
| Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
  this sounds like it could be a rap song. it is real and to the point. you would be great at writing lyrics for snoop dogg. haha.

| Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by blndeliz | [ Reply to This ]
  No way do i think u;d ever get your butt kicked! whoever told u that was a freak...anyway...about ur poem...powerfull...and yeah as u said poetry has to convey your thoughts...and urs does...rather beautifully...good goin!
| Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by mihir | [ Reply to This ]

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