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I, Vampire

Author: Visionary
ASL Info:    15/male/NJ
Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 20 /26 /8
Words: 175
Class/Type: Lyrics /Misc
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a little number i wrote that i like for its morbid touch.

I, Vampire

The blood drips from my carnal lips
Feeding off the strengths of others
Is my sinful weakness
All I can see in your eyes is bleakness
As your crimson spills to the ground
Eviscerate me, or just sedate me
Please make the guilt wash away
I came here intending to bleed
Now I’m just entrapped
By my own foolish need to feed
Off you & your strength
Eviscerate me, or just sedate me
So long as you stay
No matter what I do or say
I collapse to the floor
My bloody entrails called hope drip underneath the door
Now I am closed off
Why did I show them off?
My scars my agony
Belongs to no one but me
Not the community
I’m sorry love
For I kept nothing sacred, nothing secret
So eviscerate me, or just sedate me
Just close my eyes
And feed on my insides
Canibalism is salvation
Gouge out my filthy eyes
All they see is lies
Blind me to the devil called judgement
& rejection

Submitted on 2005-11-15 15:57:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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very good.

"My bloody entrails called hope drip underneath the door"

(the above is my favorite line)
its so nice to imagine ^-^
u rock.
keep writing
| Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by thehappyfaery | [ Reply to This ]
  kick-ass. i really liked how you repeated the line: "Eviscerate me, or just sedate me"

not really a word heard often, so it def got my attention. the whole piece had a sort of sing-song flow to it. a morbid sing-song flow of course.

My scars my agony
Belongs to no one but me

maybe that should be 'belong'? or maybe its just me.

i dont know how else to say how i really like this. kudos.

<33 sandi
| Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by Dimension_X | [ Reply to This ]
  sweet...i really liked that and it was really cool (to me) the title didnt exactly go with it but i understood how it did at the same time. i really like tha strong words used to make sure you can get the messege through. this was a nice write.
| Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]

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