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    dots Submission Name: You're in my bloodstream.dots
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    Author: Lies
    ASL Info:    18/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 56/31/6
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 1119
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1082



    Description:
       Not much to describe; just a piece of poetry written by "muah."


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    dotsYou're in my bloodstream.dots
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    The calendar seems to be flipping its pages every time I look at it.
    The seasons are changing at every glance I take at nature.
    Every time Time beats on my door, I feel like I want to quit.
    And for every question asked, I have no answer.

    The world makes me feel like a half-wit.
    I suppose, I lost my strong structure.
    For everything I do, I get no credit.
    I feel as if my soul is about to rupture.

    Then there are the moments that I find myself with you.
    And for the second, the world isn't expecting much.
    I'm a tossed ragdoll and you come to my rescue
    and comfort me with your soothing touch.

    I know most of the time, stuff said like this isn't true.
    It's a sweet berry one can't seem to clutch.
    But in our case, this is no false review.
    There is truly such.

    Maybe this is in my imagination.
    Perhaps this is just all a dream.
    However, this is gumption:
    You're in my bloodstream.




    Submitted on 2005-11-15 17:05:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a perfect work, ryhme, rythm, feel everything is to the highest level, i think you are inspration for many people.

    my favarate lines are

    The calendar seems to be flipping its pages every time I look at it.
    The seasons are changing at every glance I take at nature.
    Every time Time beats on my door, I feel like I want to quit.
    And for every question asked, I have no answer.

    this whole poem is my favarate, i will be looking forward to your comming works.
    so please do write.
    bye
    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by imagination | [ Reply to This ]
      i like when it says
    Maybe this is in my imagination.
    Perhaps this is just all a dream.
    However, this is gumption:
    You're in my bloodstream.

    it brings the end to a great halt and i love when people make the last words there title.
    Hey check out my poetry even if you have already it will be greatly apreciated.

    xoxo
    Reeses
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by Numb | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the ryhtm and the ryhme it has to it. it is really good. i really like ti how you say this
    Maybe this is in my imagination.
    Perhaps this is just all a dream.
    However, this is gumption:
    You're in my bloodstream.

    it bring the title into the poem which is good.


    :)

    Peace out


    Me xx
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by MysterydarkPoet | [ Reply to This ]


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