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    dots Submission Name: We Reminisce about Yesterdaydots
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    Author: emo-tastic
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    dotsWe Reminisce about Yesterdaydots
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    The car ride,
    backseat of his parent's car
    (strangely endearing)
    he turns around and
    signs a heart through the
    bars of lost proximity
    and animal attraction.
    I, sorely, reach
    forward as if
    my windshield and the
    back of his parent's car
    were one and the same.

    Almost instantaneously,
    the stoplight flashes green
    and from now on we're only together
    in front of a computer screen
    impersonal and impatient
    as if my keyboard had anything to say
    that I could express to him
    with keystrokes.

    I stand up and say it
    out loud, the standing ovations
    fail to compensate
    for the lost attraction
    sunday at the stoplight.




    Submitted on 2005-11-15 17:59:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like.
    I understood it perfectly and your word choice and use of was nice. It was adorable though.
    "signs a heart through the
    bars of lost proximity
    and animal attraction.
    I, sorely, reach
    forward as if
    my windshield and the
    back of his parent's car
    were one and the same."
    Incredibly cute and feeling the odd sensation of love at this point. I like, as I first stated.
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by Lies | [ Reply to This ]
      this is intriging...i want to know more after reading this. lol. i like the way you worded it alot.

    well check out my poetry and leave me some comments :)

    xoxo

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    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by Numb | [ Reply to This ]
      huh? i was getting it then i lost it- maybe i am just tired ill read it later when i am more awake- i tyhinkits good but my head just goes - wt...?



    anyhoo gonna go sleep ya'll


    Peace OUt

    Me xx :)
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by MysterydarkPoet | [ Reply to This ]


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