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Submission Name: Hand in Hand dots

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Author:	bleedinbabygrl8
ASL Info:	17/f/wa
Elite Ratio:	3.23 - 192/179/48
Words:	120

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	208
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	801

Description:
well its another one about....him

Hand in Hand dots

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Laying underneath the stars,
On a warm silent night.
Your arms are wrapped around me,
And everything feels right.

You kiss me sweet and softly,
I feel your warm gentle touch,
You help me feel protected
Under the sweet night sky rush.

My world before me is perfect.
There's nowhere else I want to be,
Except laying underneath the stars
Hand in hand, you and me.

Just when everything is perfect,
And you seem so delicately sweet,
A rush of wind comes past me
As I'm swept beneath my feet.

Nothing could be more right,
There's nowhere else I want to be.
Let's take a walk my only love,
Hand in hand, you and me.

Submitted on 2005-11-15 18:19:55 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  awww how sweet! i like this one. its like a dream come true. one day i know you guys are gonna be together. if u dont..ill...be sad... and ill let you come to myhouse and eat all the icecream...cheer up..when i see you in a couple of minuites ima give you a hug!

Fore<3r Love,
xxAmber
| Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
  yeah lies is right this definitely has the innocent aspect of love in it. not really lust but physical attraction that is dwarfed by a sense of love in its emotional sense.

Nothing could be more right,
There's nowhere else I want to be.
Let's take a walk my only love,
Hand in hand, you and me.

i think u said it pretty well and i'm glad ur happy. u better be happy
| Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  i am glad to see that there are as many poems about pain as there is about love on this site :).
but on another note i loved how you used this line "Hand in hand, you and me." not only 2ce but also used part of it for the title. a brillant piece my dear. ^_^ check out my poetry[i have some new ones] and leave me some comments.
xoxoxo
Reeses
| Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by Numb | [ Reply to This ]
  Once again, I find myself reading your stuff and deciding, "nice"
These lines are delicately written and so sweet.
"My world before me is perfect.
There's nowhere else I want to be,
Except laying underneath the stars
Hand in hand, you and me."
The repeat of that quatrain really gives in depth feeling to your feeling.
I'm sure it could be improved (I'm supposed to say that...)but I think in "improving" it, you would take out the innocent appeal of love in it.
| Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by Lies | [ Reply to This ]

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