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a new begining


Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597 /390 /111
Words: 119
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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a new begining



It calls me.
An overwhelming need.
To let it plant its seed,
and let it feed on the salt of my tears.
It calls me
To extinguish the fire I’ve built.
for me to wilt,
to put my knees to my chin,
as I did in my mother's womb.
The pillow to my chest.
It calls me
to stay curled, cocooned
in the shelter of my blanket,
the warmth of my bed.
It calls, rings inside my head.
I rise.
Choose to let it ring unanswered.
I stretch my hands to the sky.
salute the sun.
howl at the moon.
dance around while naked.
choclate kisses.
music filles the room.
and I
emerge
like a butterfly




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  this is very nice.. I liked it very much. I agree with Ron ... very
great expression
bravo! great
thoughts and
glad to see that
in the end it
only gets better

peace & smiles
Penny
| Posted on 2006-02-05 00:00:00 | by pennymarie | [ Reply to This ]
  I really liked this
To me you were writing about Depression and the pain it causes
Then in the end You were ready to Sprout your wings like the butterfly and grasp at the new and rewarding Life in front of you
Excellently worded and said
God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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