Description: disclaimer: im not sure why i wrote this, coz im not one of those ppl hu think that structure an rhyme scheme an stuff shud all be ditched
maybe im resentful cuz of mi sister hu can write real gud but doesnt seem to notice?
those little red lines -------------------------------------------
Strive to be original! they said
so she did
but her sister
who always got top marks in english
because of her perfect grammar
and liberal use of appropriate poetic devices
not to mention meticulous metre
won the competition instead
Does the piece make the reader use their wit to understand? they said
so she tried not to make her meanings too obvious
but others, with their unsubtle but well-polished analogies
got better marks
Are things stated "poetically" and not spoon feeding emotions? they said
so she didnt describe her fear and confusion outright
but instead used her words to paint the river-side reeds
ruffled and rumpled by the wind
but her teacher scrawled in red
"this was meant to be a poem about a negative emotion you have felt"
and made her rewrite it
so she did
and now she too
writes polished perfections
that have come through the
spell-checker
with no little red lines
This is really good. Though I have no sister to compare myself to I can understand how you feel and relate to it. But you are a goood writer. Great write.
Your sister may be a good writer but after reading what you've written I gotta say that you are a good writer too - maybe you and your sister can share writing ideas!
this peom shows just how we tend to write our words the way others expect them to be done, in a way this crashes our creative side, well doine in your expression, i really like this poem
Submission Name: those little red lines
