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    dots Submission Name: What really mattersdots
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    Author: annae cattaya
    ASL Info:    22
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 9/10/9
    Words: 281
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 1726
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1748



    Description:
       These are just lyrics to a song. I hope that if you truely love someone, you can see past fault and continue to love them for their timeless moments they gave you--even if you are no longer together.--everyone gives you a gift and forgetting your love is not the way to heal a broken heart--take the good memories and smile when you are down. They are with you always. The memories were beautiful when they happened, so why should time change that.



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    dotsWhat really mattersdots
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    I tried to hold your hand
    I tried to make you understand
    I tried to make you see
    the beauty you can't see

    I tried to find you
    your walls were so high
    Your angry because I
    accepted you with no "why"

    Nothing in this world is worth your sanity
    not for simple superficial vanity
    Baby, no longer stand by--live your life
    and see what really matters--what really matters.

    You say you have nice things
    you say you have everything
    it tears me apart is you dont conceive
    how much this nothing means to me
    when you compare it to what you could be


    I tried to hold you close
    when you brought me roses
    you see its not me though
    I want you to show me what I already know

    I showed you the night sky
    I showed you the moon in your eyes
    I showed you what beauty is when you saw
    your reflection in my eyes.


    Nothing in this world is worth your sanity
    not for simple superficial vanity
    Baby, no longer stand by--live your life
    and see what really matters--what really matters.

    You say you have nice things
    you say you have everything
    it tears me apart is you dont conceive
    how much this nothing means to me
    when you compare it to what you could be

    Nothing in this world is worth your sanity
    not for simple superficial vanity
    Baby, no longer stand by--live your life
    and see what really matters--what really matters.












    Submitted on 2005-11-16 07:19:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like what you have going on with this one, it makes me want to hear the song. Your rhymes are simple, but decent (my favorite is sanity with vanity). Content wise, you also did well. I get the impression its a girl struggling to get her partner to open up emotionally. I'm a guy, so its kinda a different perspective for me. If you wanted to be daring, you could break off the rhyme and try to dig deeper into the emotional content, i think that could be cool, but i dont know what sort effect it would have on your song.

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    Luke
    | Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by thescarletabyss | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this song, it reminds me of the kind of song Daniel Bedingfield would write; it's full of emotion and desire for realism. I especially like the part;

    I tried to hold you close
    when you brought me roses
    you see its not me though
    I want you to show me what I already know

    I showed you the night sky
    I showed you the moon in your eyes
    I showed you what beauty is when you saw
    your reflection in my eyes.

    That's just brilliant! It's the sort of thing anyone would love to hear if they are feeling unconfident and/or low. Just one person saying this to another, would make them feel great!

    The only thing I didn't understand was when I read the line;

    it tears me apart is you dont conceive

    It doesn't make sense to me. Should it be; It tears me apart that you don't conceive?

    Anyways, I think it's excellent! Mel.
    | Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by litllost | [ Reply to This ]


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