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    dots Submission Name: Frighten- by the journeys enddots
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    Author: DonKB
    ASL Info:    34/m/goergia
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 19/17/11
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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       Well Eddie died and i sat in my room alone and wrote this .

    Eddie we all loved you man !



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    dotsFrighten- by the journeys enddots
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    Frighten- by the journeys end


    Moving through times endless churning , turning leep
    Fearing the moment of lives silent sleep
    Frighten- by the journeys end !

    Moving with hast hoping that time will pass
    Fearing we’ll fade into the looking glass
    Frighten- by the journeys end !

    Moving faster and faster as we pass through time
    Fearing the answer to all lives crime
    Frighten- by the journeys end !

    Moving closer and closer to the glowing light
    Fearing the moment of our flight
    Frighten - by the journeys end !





    Submitted on 2005-11-16 10:16:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      um okay... i see what your trying to say... but i dont really like the repeition of the "frightne, by the journeys end.."

    its not the bestline to repeat, i think. perhaps it should be frightENED?

    read my poem "thoughts on life" and see if you agree with it.
    | Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by dublhelix | [ Reply to This ]


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