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    dots Submission Name: Tell Me Howdots
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    Author: bilal anaim
    ASL Info:    45/M/Philadelphia
    Elite Ratio:    2.34 - 237/254/101
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 422
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    Bytes: 711



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       i wrote it for few ppl i have in mind,plz mind my words


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    dotsTell Me Howdots
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    you can hurt me if you don't even try
    I'm sensitive in places that don't make others cry

    words have inflicted upon me these wounds
    They've healed some........
    But sometimes they've re-open by you

    I'll listen to you when you tell me how ?
    How not ,and how to ? so we make it now

    Respecting your person ,I'll try to be real
    Sensitive to my words ,and how you would feel ?

    Color me crazy ,or paint me dark blue
    Challenge my reason for not staying true

    Exit all balance ,and enter my mind
    Give it a whirl ,and see what you find




    Submitted on 2004-04-23 07:01:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The ending four stanzas seemed to have a good rhyming and rhythm combination. And your feelings were shown with good words. In a way or two you were telling the person to stay away, or come close with peace. Good job!
    | Posted on 2004-04-23 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]
      Way kewl :D Great rhyme, nice stlye, short 'n' sweet =P Really like this, its different too, think ill +fav it
    | Posted on 2004-04-23 00:00:00 | by ShadowHarlequin | [ Reply to This ]


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