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    dots Submission Name: Lost Without You - Momdots
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    Author: CaramelCandy
    ASL Info:    37 Female NYC
    Elite Ratio:    6.07 - 118/144/57
    Words: 254
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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       Dedication:To Mom
    Author's Comments:
    'Mom, you inspire me to be the best I can be.... Never judging always caring, you are my comfort zone without end, I love you greatly mother...it is a love that cannot me measured.' As the ring without end, so is my love for my Mother; without her I am utterly lost in this world. This poem may seem dark, but it is one of my greatest fears to lose my Mother to asthma like I did my grandpa. I have come to terms with accepting that all must die in time, but the thought of losing her creates and unnerving feeling of fear. Tks for reading, Saby~*~


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    dotsLost Without You - Momdots
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    Unnerving this aching feeling
    of great despair that I carry.
    A worry...a scare so intense...
    who can relieve me?
    Self-reassurance bears no weight
    on this treacherous emotion of sudden loss.
    Will I awaken to a wheezing body?
    Will the paced breathing cease to be heard?

    My heart lies in fear every darkened night
    as thoughts begin to race rampant
    through my mind.
    Don't sleep! Look out for her...
    it might be the night you bid her farewell.
    I can no longer deprive the sleep
    it has taken control over me.

    My only prayer is
    to hear the sound of breathing in the morning.
    Saturated life, long lasting
    living, living....
    Stretching as the sun rises
    and bidding adieu to the day;
    let her leaving not catch me unaware.

    Can her fleet not be one of despair, I beg.
    Rage, anguish and suffering part from me!
    One day it will be her soul
    God calls to rest in the luminous paradise.
    My heart suspects the day is soon,
    my eyes swell every night
    like the water that shimmers at twilight.

    How can I bear to say goodbye?
    Where will I be without her by my side?
    No longer to see her smile
    or hear her laughter throughout the house.
    To share my deepest troubles
    and hear her words of wisdom and counsel.
    Where will I go?
    Where will I be?

    Without her I am lost forever....

    2/19/05 Saby J. Rodriguez, All Rights Reserved




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      This is a very heartfelt poem. I can feel your worry and concern as they are well conveyed with your words. It is wonderful to know you have such a strong love for your mom. I have a strong bond with my mom too and I dont know what I would do if I ever lost her. I have had my share of death in this life and I have lost some of the closest people to me. My grandfather who suffered with cancer for a while before he died was like a father to me. My dad died when I was four years old and my grandfather was the best man I ever knew. I took care of him at home the last 6 months of his life and I often worried about what I was going to do without him in my life. Reading your poem made me think about him and how difficult it is to fear losing someone who is so precious in your life. I understand all too well. This is a wonderful poem, a sad one too, but most of all beautiful as it expresses your true and honest feelings and love for your mom. I hope everything turns out ok for you. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I am such a sucker for writes like this.
    This will be a fav for me.

    Mothers, fathers and children writes have a soft spot in my heart.

    I know not your mothers condition and I hope that she is well. You have had her all your life and losing her would be hard to live with. I lost my father and that tore me to pieces. I wrote about it here on the site. I didn't write it for comments sake i wrote to heal.
    My mother is alive and lives 2700 miles away and I miss her every day.
    Your write have made me miss her even more.
    Before I end my comment I want to leave you with one thought.

    She loves you very much b/c if she didn't you would not be feeling the way you do now. Enjoy her as she does you.

    I love this write allot.

    As you probably can tell I am full of advice and If I have stepped out of line on this, then I am sorry.. Must be the father in me. Five childen have that effect on me. TEE HEE

    Greatest Respect and Admiration

    Clyde
    | Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a heartbreakingly beautiful poem. I know exactly what you feel. My mother has MS and ever since I was a child, I've lived with the fear that I'd lose her. Right now it's been six years since I last saw her. Yes, six. You don't know how lucky you are to have her by your side, and to have felt her motherly love for thirty years. Whoever there is in your life, there is no one and never will be anyone like your Mum. Cherish every moment you have with her, and try your best to be happy that she's there, even though the fear will return with the night...

    Sorry, I've gotten distracted. It's just that I can relate to every word in this poem. Thank you.
    | Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by DeepDreamer2008 | [ Reply to This ]
      Stuff like this gets me going. I lost my mom recently in July and thats something that will forever be at the front of my mind. Its a scary thought, and still scary for me now that its actually happened. She was the only one I had. But something I noticed is that you seem really worried and scared. I have not the slightest clue to how your moms condition is, and i pray that its tip top...but while she is here...appreciate every minute. All the nagging and complaining and advice you didn't wanna hear...To not be able to hear it again, ironically hurts so bad. So I wish you and your mom the best. I'll pray for you both. But it was a good poem...opened me up a lil bit
    | Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by PrettyRicki | [ Reply to This ]


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