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Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 105
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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hmmm, yeah....................


These words of sorrow
Overflow my heart a thousand times
Standing next to him,
But never with him,
My heart was in love with a stranger
Looking into his eyes I see,
What could have been.
The disguised teacher of love,
Unveiled to me pain,
But the mind re-learns,
And memories fade,
But the love I felt with him,
Like wine to a cloth
It stains my heart,
Never shall I give my whole,
Let me off your burning window sill,
And slip me a sleeping pill,
Let me go into the darkness,
And find myself again,
For me tomorrow never comes.

Submitted on 2005-11-16 15:47:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Thanks so much for your warm comment on my poem "Flashbulb". I had to have a run back through it to find the big words but I guess there were not too many.

| Posted on 2006-10-19 00:00:00 | by siradrian | [ Reply to This ]
  this is a very sweet and meaningful poem. it has just the right amount of rythem and I think you did very well. I hope to see more of your work.
| Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by lost and alone | [ Reply to This ]
  i like it...ALOT. that was really good and i feel that way too actually right now about someone and i guess we're kinda considered 'best friends' and yah. this was really good and was nice how you compared things and things do repeat themselves over alot.
keep it up.
| Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]

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