Description: a prompt i thought of. and i just went with it. hope you all enjoy =]
If I Had Wings... -------------------------------------------
If I Had Wings...
Id fly back in time and walk with the dinosaurs.
And run away when the TREX comes to try and eat me.
Id fly back into the time when George Bush was elected and fly away with the ballots and change them myself.
....Although it would take me awhile.
Maybe if I had wings...
Id fly only sometimes just to be free.
And scream "FREEDOM" Braveheart style at the top of my lungs.
Many people ask me what wings would I get.
"Angel or Devil wings?", "Feather or Bat Wings?"
Nope.
Id just be me with the power to fly.
Tumbling in and out of clouds and dogding planes.
Come back to my house later and continue with Life.
Everyonce in awhile... I'll fly.
Dodge planes...
..and tumble in and out of clouds.
Fly just to fly, that'd be me. I don't really think there is anything else I'd do...besides scare a couple friends. And gloat at one in particular
This was good, I agree with Imz, the freedomous(I have no idea if that is a word or not) feeling this gives is quite a spirit up lifter.
This comment might be a bit confusing, I'm sorry. If you get nothing out of this just know that I thought it was cool and it got me thinking about flying...and scaring my friends
This was very cute. I think you have a free spirit about you and it comes through your writing. I think this was just so refreshing to read. I'd changed the ballots also. lol. Very good, very good indeed.
Poor george but he has it coming, I really like that line about changing the ballot you a millions of others would too i think nice job keep tapping the keys adnil
This is a very good write. I love the sense of freedom that is expressed in this. I can relate to this as well, as I have always thought if I could come back as an animal, I would want to be a seagull. They have the best of it all. The ocean front as their home, food always plentiful and the ability to fly and soar high in the sky. They are truly free and can even poop on people hahahhahaaaa! But seriously, I enjoyed reading this. I laughed a couple of times here too which is wonderful. This is very creative and well written. Take care.
This was another excellent write by you You really are turning me on to your style of writing You have an extremely creative imagination and seem quite able to transpose your thoughts into your writing
I had this dream as a child that I was flying among the clouds and I swear to you sometimes I really do believe it happenend Thanks for sharing this Please take Care of yourself Ron
This, my friend, is magnificent. After all the emotional poetry on here, all the wannabe pro-writers with their huge words and prejudice that comes with those, you came out here and deliver something like this. No emotional connections, no big words, simple, brilliant.
I loved so much about this piece, maybe because I'm the dreamer type, but these are just a few and brief explaination:
-"I'd fly back into the time when George Bush was elected..."- Ol' George gets a lot of critisism over here in the UK and that just made me smile... -"...scream "FREEDOM"- Braveheart style at the top of my lungs."- Braveheart rocks and the way you incorporated does as well. Wouldn't we all? -"I'd just be me with the power to fly."- This is my favourite part of all. Saying you wouldn't have wings is a great way of sticking two fingers up to change, so to speak.
So, no understatement here, this is was BRILLIANT and definately the best poem I have read in a long time, this deserves more than a favs addition, I'd give it an award or something, enter it in a competition with corrected grammar and you'll do well. Brilliant work!
I like this a lot. If you take the words at face value, it sounds really innocent, but you can kind of assign a deeper meaning to a lot of what you said, and turn everything into a metaphor for maybe the perfect life, or a good day, or something else. It's very well written, great job.
i like the last sentence. that was really well written. And the idea of wings drew me in, since its a beautiful concept.
This piece has a lot of potential. the T-REX line kind of threw me off but you got me back again in the continuing lines. But overall i like this, its original and makes me smile
I love it. It Kind of makes me want to grow wings of my own. It's was really well written and your absolutely correct George Bush shouldn't be president! Well anyways just want to let you know how I felt about this poem or whatever it is, I'd give it a 8 out of 10.
god, what i wouldn't give to have the ability to fly. i really like how you describe your flight... who needs wings (angel, bat or otherwise) when all you want is to be free?
sorry, i can't think of anything else to say in your comment but i really do appreciate this piece. keep it up and a belated welcome to the site!
i liked this alot, I think we all wish sometimes that we could just fly away from everything and be free. Well done, I am going to add this to my faves.
I think your right about George bush too, someone should've changed the ballots.
Submission Name: If I Had Wings...
