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    dots Submission Name: Gather 'Rounddots

    Author: brokenroses
    ASL Info:    17/m/indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 191/192/62
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       just about the fellowship of winter.

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    dotsGather 'Rounddots

    November's icy blasts,
    Cutting at the grass.
    Winter's painful flakes,
    Hidden by the drapes.
    Out of sight,
    Out of mind,
    And all is fine.
    Now kindle the fire,
    And drink us our cider.
    Leave it alone,
    'Til the sun hath shown.

    Until summer comes,
    Gather round, my sons.
    Find the fire and sit,
    Rest your bones a bit.
    We shall stay 'til drunk,
    'Til winter has sunk.
    Spirits drown the cold,
    So come and drink,
    And warm the soul.

    Submitted on 2005-11-16 20:52:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yay to alcohol on those cold winter nights, nice piece every line helps to paint a vivid and comy picture in your head.

    | Posted on 2005-11-20 00:00:00 | by Vastmark | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this for some reason I saw a visual of a hibernating Bear at peace

    And then I realised that hibernating bear was my dream for the world
    For Us to Live in Peace
    You really captured my mind with this write
    Thank You
    Take Care
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      awe matie, i didn't see any deeper meaning but it was pleasent. i'd take out "my sons" in the second line of the second. i think it would flow better.
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by splifford | [ Reply to This ]
      Sounds like a good time, sitting around the fire and drinking and laughing and talking and just hanging out while winter rages it's best outside. That's a pretty awesome picture in my head. I liked that this seemed simple but had a sort of slightly deeper meaning hidden inside it.

    | Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by Anticlownperson | [ Reply to This ]
      Aye matey, who shall we send out into the bitter winter wind and drifts when we run out of cider and booze?... very nice write brother, makes me want to dig in with a nice cup o' joe and baileys, wouldn't change a single word...

    | Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by Milo shanley | [ Reply to This ]

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