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    dots Submission Name: "Movin On..."dots

    Author: PrettyRicki
    ASL Info:    19
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 29/49/11
    Words: 572
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Iight...this is my past relationship laid out for all to see...I mean...I couldn't tell you in conversation anymore better than this can tell you so hopefully you take the time out to read it...Hope it keeps your attention

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    dots"Movin On..."dots

    “Movin On”
    By: Ricki

    Here we go again,
    Same occurrence, ‘nother day
    All your complaints and put downs
    And the words I didn’t say

    We been through this before
    And right now Im not so sure,
    Thinkin bout packin my shit,
    And walkin str8 out that door

    You don’t seem to get it
    That what u say hits me hard
    Although theyre just words
    They always leave a deep scar

    “You ain’t gon be shit”
    Time and time again
    Aside from my partner,
    Thought u were my fuckin friend

    The one that I trusted
    With my life and much more
    My life was rough enough then,
    And you’ve made it more sore

    “Stop bein negative man,
    I on’t need that in my life…”
    “My mom just fuckin passed yo
    So before you speak, think twice”

    “You gon live a basic life,
    Go to work and there you are”
    Hearin that from you,
    Just shredded my heart apart

    “Hol up…just wait…
    Lets get on you for a minute
    Think about my situation
    Before you get wrapped up in it:

    You don’t know half the bullshit
    That occurs day to day
    All the shit that goes wrong
    In an un-intended way

    And who the hell are you,
    To condemn me to fail?
    When the whole time I been witchu
    Might as well been in jail

    You ain’t here to motivate
    Your only here to bitch
    A rash that only gets worse
    As I continue to itch

    You say that u love me
    And you only try to help…
    Well if that’s your way of helping,
    Then go help someone else

    Im a good person…
    All the potential in the world
    And the more that I think,
    The more my fists, start to curl

    “I don’t need you to treat me
    Like the dirt you kick around”
    Slowly but surely,
    Imma turn my frown upside down

    I can feel it inside me,
    That Im way better off
    I wonder how you’ll feel
    When this love is lost

    A few months gone by,
    Slowly but surely doin better
    I finally put an end
    To that frequent bad weather

    But then all the sudden,
    I hear my phone start to play,
    “Hey, wassup…
    How u feelin today?”

    “Im doin ok,
    Things can always be worse
    But why you callin me?
    I gotta ask first…

    “I been doin alotta thinking
    And im sorry for what I did…
    The pain of bein without u
    Just can’t be hid…

    I want you back,
    No other way to put it…
    I thought about what u said
    And I finally understood it

    “Look, I know…
    Exactly how u feel,
    But fact still remains,
    I gotta be real:

    All the things you said,
    You said for a reason…
    Constantly putting me down
    And even made me start believin…

    “Maybe I am fucked up…
    And I do need to change…
    There might be some things
    I need to rearrange”

    But now I have learned,
    Im fine the way I am,
    I don’t need you to make me feel,
    Any less of a man

    I love you…That’s true
    Forever a part of my heart…
    But its finally time for me
    To embark on a fresh start…

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    ||| Comments |||
      strait-up raw feelings right there.
    its amazing how much words can get to you. really touch you & make you feel them.
    you did really just wrote your story out here..
    not an easy thing to do.

    a really personal piece, yet still so many can relate to feelings that you wrote here.
    all the emotions that go into a relationship anyway- then something else to come into it. All of the back & forth love & hate...
    it really makes you wonder.

    You did a great job on this.. you made your readers feel it.
    take care
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      This one wasn't as smooth flowing as your others but given the emotional situation that is understandable and forgivable...

    I often wonder why its always the good hearted people who get burned in relationships? why do we attract the negative people? I got years on you and I still do not know the answers to that...lol where's the magic 8 ball when you need it?

    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay...now...ths was raw material. It takes a lot of strength to tell some one that you love you can't be will them. It takes even more strength to walk away and not look back. I know, for I just did this less then a week ago. Worst part...we have a child together.

    I felt the emotions in this. I don't know if it's because I share them same exact feelings right now...or if you really have a way with words. I think it's a combination of both.

    You are doing a great job at being added to my fav's! You touched a certain place in my heart right now...how can I overlook that. Show respect where respect is due.

    Oh yeah...and coming from a woman...once we begin to bytch...it doesn't stop. LMFAO!

    Much love Ricki! ( I need to get you a nickname) LOL

    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really a personal piece. you just laying out your heart for everyone to see...that takes courage, and the fact that you were so open, honest and upfront, is commendable!

    so often, once a person starts to move on from a relationship, the other person pops up and throws everything upside down again...but only for a minute. you showed here that you have come so far from where you had been in that relationship, that you werent fooled back into the same thing again...not always easy...nicely done!

    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]

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