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    dots Submission Name: The Gift Boxdots
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    Author: CaramelCandy
    ASL Info:    37 Female NYC
    Elite Ratio:    6.07 - 118/144/57
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/
    Total Views: 1231
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    Description:
       Reflective piece of self...we seldom look in the mirror to see the beauty that is within us. Sometimes we speak negatively of ourself and we forget that each one is a gift box.

    If we take time to search for the beauty within, then pain, anguish, suffering cannot consume us. Instead we will consume it with beautiful thoughts of self...God made us with a wonderful thought in mind. 'Mankind is the greatest creation and masterpiece.' I often imagine God saying, "There is nothing more beautiful than my creation of man; a masterpiece, indeed, which I love."

    Thank you for reading, love Saby~*~


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    dotsThe Gift Boxdots
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    To self reflections....

    A box lies adamantly across from me;
    craftily wrapped in splendor and bows.
    It shines like glittery gold
    casting a reflection oh so bold.

    What patience and stillness it holds?

    Waiting to unfold; revealing
    a lifetime of mysteries untold.
    The object of which my eyes behold
    stirs my curiosity of the unknown.

    What past secret does it retain?

    I contemplate the beauty in it;
    so light a gift presented before me.
    My fingers stroke it tenderly
    as I perceive the significance it brings.

    Shall I open it?

    A still-life voice hidden within
    needing attentive warmth of hands.
    In tearing the sides with gentle care
    the gifted box unveils with grace.

    As I slowly peaked into the box
    mirrors surrounded the inner part.
    Peering down in depth;
    The gift I saw was a reflection of me.

    Posted 11/17/05




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      I liked this a lot...it showed a lot of emotion...
    It had a lot of really good imagry..
    It was thought provoking and that is always good in a poem.

    Very good job on this one...

    ...jessie
    | Posted on 2005-11-24 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      I must say, you are a very talented writer. Everyting i have read from you thus far is very well done, shows emotion, and brings about thoughts on the subject. This piece is no different.

    A still-life voice hidden within
    needing attentive warmth of hands.
    In tearing the sides with gentle care
    the gifted box unveils with grace.

    As I slowly peaked into the box
    mirrors surrounded the inner part.
    Peering down in depth;
    The gift I saw was a reflection of me.

    I really like these two. The gift of owns own iner self is the gift one craves. To truely know what is in ones hard is a goal many have. Wonderful piece.
    Ja Ne
    Akai_ Ame


    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by Akai_Ame | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww...this was such a sweet poem. I love it, it's so pretty. You really are a gift box, and you are sharing your gift with the reder. This poem ws really ood, because it can make everyone who reads it appreciate themselves a bit better, because now they understand how good they ar, and even though the outside world says different, in the end, you know who you really are. Anyways, this was portrayed in such a beautiful, and you have made me feel good about myself today, so I thank you kindly, and a lot. Many blessings to you.
    Peace and love,
    Aya
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice simple flow here. Keeps the reader looking for more.

    I like the images that are painted through your words. I can see the box as you describe it to me in my minds eye.

    Questions asked by the write but makes the reader reflect within themself.

    Very thought evoking, simple and original write here.

    Burning the midnight oil i see.

    Great write

    Respect and Admiration

    Clyde
    | Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]


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