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    dots Submission Name: Words of Wisdomdots
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    Author: withblindedeyez
    ASL Info:    19/m/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 83/121/58
    Words: 340
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 786
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1931



    Description:
       this is like i'm preaching and it's something knew that i just wrote, and it scares me!


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    dotsWords of Wisdomdots
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    I will rise like Lazarus with the sun
    To shine like on everyone, who has
    Lived in the dark, with there heart
    Apart, away from the light, it shines
    So bright, it blinds the all-knowing eyes
    Of a wise mans mind, leaving him
    With blinded eyes . . .

    Flash's of his pearly gate, where you're
    judged by fate. Is yours strong enough
    to last, or did it just past, you by? In the
    Blink of your eyes, he sees your disguise
    for he doesn't see this body, he sees the
    Soul that breathes, crying out its alive.
    Rather if it's a angel's halo or devil eye's,
    He sees the Faith you've locked inside . . .

    Thou Shall Not Judge Me, for he did not
    its all one great big-mastered plot. For him to
    Reach down his helping hand, and break the
    Boundaries that lie between men. For we are
    Separated not in our hearts, but in our mind . . .

    In time we we'll find, it's not the skin you
    Were, or the color of your eye's, or the way
    You dress; it's when it's time to go, will you
    Take the hand of your brother or sister beside
    You and pray with them for the best. . .

    These words are my wisdom given to me
    by him. To not speak would be a sin. I shall
    Not hold my tongue, even if it a fins, I'm only
    Using the voice he gave me, to say what he
    Wants me to say. I am his message written in
    Skin, with his pencil and paper, he wrote how
    this life begins . . .

    These words are my weapons, like a loaded gun
    Except I don't shoot them just for fun, you may
    Think this is the end, but our redemption it being
    Written has it begins, the rest is up to you and the
    Soul that lies within . . .




    Submitted on 2005-11-16 23:46:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow...deep.

    You had some errors that could take away from it though. I'd revise it one more time. I noticed "lie's" which should be "lies". OTher than that. Very nice work.
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by Zabriel | [ Reply to This ]
      now that is what i truly would call IMPRESSIVE a job very very very well done the way you structured this is just amazing , i've enjoyed reading it very much , never stop thoughts from flowing :)
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by Tarek Refaat | [ Reply to This ]


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