it was different but i cant tell you that i liked it there was some thing about it that I didn;t like cant really figure it out, maybe it was because i usually expect more from you thats not your fault john*
i really like this one... alot i like the way when i was reading it i could here it like somone was sayignitin my head i thought it was well cool you have a very unique style and your words help the reader to paint a very clear picture i'd love to read more of your poems take care izzi x
i like this one alot. I'm adding it to my favorites. And your unique writing style, the pauses in between...its great...and I relate, and I feel like you're writing about the readers pain, as well as your own...its a wonderful piece of work
This perhaps truly describes of grief. Unique and...cool. Well, to me. A picture brings out a thousand words, but vice versa seems impossible. But you had made up a picture with such a few words. Great Job.
wow this is a very different peom, i really like the way you have set it out- it adds to it. it makes the reader actually have to relate to the peom to understand it which is good. i like the way u use your words to paint a picture. get on writing this is great